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Post by Aunflin »

Ghost wrote:I was so hungry for another post I let my standards slip.
lol :lol:
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Ahem ... yer "plumber's crack" is showing too :P
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i guess i should post, ive just kinda lacked "inspiration" lately....
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Ok, how's THAT for hammering the ball off in a different direction ? :lol: :smash:

That one just sorta poured outta me in a big stream-of-consciousness rush during lunch. :crazy: :mrgreen:

Felonius is gonna KILL me ... :twisted:
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That was amazing Brad. :worship: :worship: :worship: :worship:

I laughed until I cried, good thing my office door was shut. That has to inspire someone to post (probably felonius). :wink:

Current: Brad Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Inside the Actor’s Studio), Entertaining +1 (oh man was it), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rules broken) TOTAL: 4

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 15 O: 15 E: 14 C: 13 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 57
Brad_H P: 15 O: 14 E: 15 C: 14 RB: -2 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 56
Kahrey P: 12 O: 6 E: 12 C: 11 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 41
Aunflin P: 9 O: 5 E: 9 C: 9 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 30
Mrdude P: 5 O: 2 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 17
Ghost P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 4
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genres used so far:
Animation: Japanese Anime, Yu-Gi-Oh, Magic the Gathering
Comedy: Comedy, Slapstick/Odd Couple, Absurdity, Whose Line is it? (see TV)
Children: Children
Drama: Drama, Out of Body Experience
Impressions (Famous Authors): Steven King (see Horror)
Impressions (Literature): Watership Down, Hardy Boys (see Mystery)
Impressions (Movies): 1950’s B-Movie Monster Flick, Beach Party,
Good Omens,
Fantasy: Fantasy, Modern,
Fiction: Modern Day, Urban Contemporary, Young adult
Horror: Horror, Gothic, Steven King
Mystery: Hardy Boys
Poetry: an Epic Poem, AD&D Filk, Haiku Duel, Sonnet, Prophecy
Romance: Romance, Vomit-Inducing, Cheesy, Ghost Story
Sci-fi: Sort Of, Alien Encounter, Biotech Thriller, Drama
Spy: Anachronistic Private Eye, Spy (Secret life of Robert Mitty),
TV: Twin Peaks, Cooking Show, Soap Opera "As the IBDoF Turns", Whose line is it ? (Super Heroes), Star Trek TNG (X rated), Inside the Actor’s Studio
Other: Stream-of-Consciousness, Screen Play Script, Flashbacks, Epistolary

Disclaimer: The opinions expressed here are solely those of Judge Roy Bean and not those of the administrator, any moderators, or of the IDBOF (but they should be). :mrgreen:
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Very good, Brad! :clap: :worship:
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Thank you. I'll be here all week. Try the salisbury yaksteak, and remember to tip your waiter. :lol:

I feel bad pearl harboring poor Felon like that ... my muse made me do it.

Minor continuity clarification: today is actually the 100th anniversary of "Bloom's Day" ... the "125" that appears in my post merely indicates that it's set 25 years in the future, and I conveniently overlooked the fact that James Lipton will probably be long dead by then. :deviate:

For interested readers ...

http://www.theglobeandmail.com/servlet/ ... earts/Arts
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I took advantage of Felon's tardiness today to do a little polishing ... I figured he'd appreciate the extra effort I spent painting some nose art on that bomb I dropped on him. :lol:
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We are not going to let Brad get the Sherlock with only one post, are we? :oops: :smash:
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Excellent felonius. :clap: :clap:

Payback time, streetlight categorization, closet necrophilia, etc… All good fun so far (I think :twisted: ).

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Post by felonius »

Thanks, your Holiness. :P

Brad - right back atcha! Possible continuation later! :twisted:

I laughed hard when I read that - there's enough material in there to keep this game going for years. Quite the brain fart if it's true that all came out during a single lunch hour!

My mom WAS actually at Berkeley for a while, for your information - but not as a professor, as a...well, that would be telling.
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Watch whatchoo sayin' about my man Vishnu, and please pass the Yaksteak.

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Quite the brain fart if it's true that all came out during a single lunch hour!
Yeah, it was sort of a delayed retaliation for that "Gard" post of yours from a ways back :P

The idea began percolating in my brain after I read about Bloom's Day in the morning, before leaving for work, and then it all sorta popped, like a swollen literary zit, when I brainstored for 30 mins or so during lunch hour ... after that, all it took was about 30 minutes of typing to finish and post the first draft. I returned a couple of times later that afternoon, during the occasional 10 minute break, to polish it and expand a few spots. :deviate:

/me pauses to read Felon's counterattack :shock:

"Gophers ... Crouching Republican, Hidden Agenda ..." Blahahahah :lol: :clap:

Hehehehe ... I like it :thumb:

At somepoint someone's gonna have to make a move on advancing the main ongoing plot (the nojshe caper) ... but I don't mind killing a little time in the meanwhile, taking literary potshots at each other.

We've already gored Kilty, Felon, and Myself (2x) ... I wonder who's up next for the literary dipping chair ? :twisted:
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Weekly Sherlock Winner

Brad 4
felonius 4
Aunflin 1

I can not award a Sherlock for just one post. No matter how great they were. Consider yourselves 4 points ahead of the competition for this week’s award.


Headline of the Ole IDBoF Times on June 27, 2004:

*** NO WEEKLY SHERLOCK WINNER ***

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No point ?

Not even half a point ? :cry:
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Ok posted ... slight change of pace again :)

I advanced the plot by offing the 2 teens from the bar, and fleshing out 'Joshua' a tad more.

The implication is that Suin Olef hasn't been idle since the disappearance of Elliot, and that more than 1 Earthbound organization is trying to find out just what the heck is going on.

For those of you who are unfamiliar with Government Conspiracy theory literature (not that there's any truth to them that I'm aware of), the ficitonal "Blue Berets" are ostensibly a US military special-ops intelligence outfit tasked with investigating & cleaning up the mess related to possible alien visitations ... seizing evidence, and disappearing people prone to talking.

They predate the "Men in Black" movie by a good 30 years ... this is old school conspiracy stuff :lol:

Who knows - I may yet tie them in with the MIB boys, just to draw in the youngsters :clap:
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Post by Ghost »

Very good Brad, :clap:

And now back to the story … the Hardy boys dead :cry: ... I can’t believe it :cry: ... tell me it aint so … :cry:

Current: Brad Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (International Espionage), Entertaining +1 (cat got your tongue ), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rules broken) TOTAL: 4

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 16 O: 16 E: 15 C: 14 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 61
Brad_H P: 16 O: 15 E: 16 C: 15 RB: -2 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 60
Kahrey P: 12 O: 6 E: 12 C: 11 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 41
Aunflin P: 9 O: 5 E: 9 C: 9 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 30
Mrdude P: 5 O: 2 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 17
Ghost P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 4
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genres used so far:
Animation: Japanese Anime, Yu-Gi-Oh, Magic the Gathering
Comedy: Comedy, Slapstick/Odd Couple, Absurdity, Whose Line is it? (see TV)
Children: Children
Drama: Drama, Out of Body Experience, International Espionage
Impressions (Famous Authors): Steven King (see Horror)
Impressions (Literature): Watership Down, Hardy Boys (see Mystery)
Impressions (Movies): 1950’s B-Movie Monster Flick, Beach Party,
Good Omens,
Fantasy: Fantasy, Modern,
Fiction: Modern Day, Urban Contemporary, Young adult
Horror: Horror, Gothic, Steven King
Mystery: Hardy Boys,
Poetry: an Epic Poem, AD&D Filk, Haiku Duel, Sonnet, Prophecy
Romance: Romance, Vomit-Inducing, Cheesy, Ghost Story
Sci-fi: Sort Of, Alien Encounter, Biotech Thriller, Drama
Spy: Anachronistic Private Eye, Spy (Secret life of Robert Mitty),
TV: Twin Peaks, Cooking Show, Soap Opera "As the IBDoF Turns", Whose line is it ? (Super Heroes), Star Trek TNG (X rated), Inside the Actor’s Studio, Barbara Walter Special
Other: Stream-of-Consciousness, Screen Play Script, Flashbacks, Epistolary

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Gee ... no chuckle for the reference to a coroner's wing of a "J. Kevorkian Memorial Hospital" ? Sheesh :lol:
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Post expanded slightly ... same ending though, in the event someone's in the process of drafting the next post.

Somebody go ! :P
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More minor tweaking.
the Hardy boys dead :cry:
Hey, don't blame me - they died a long time ago, when video games became more popular among teens than reading.

Besides, it was only fitting that ... ahem ... curiosity in the 'cat' eventually killed them. :slap: :lol:

C'mon people - you can't be bored or running out of ideas already !
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Since no points were awarded last week, due to a tie, perhaps we should make this week double or nothing ?

The lure of 2 points might help dispell the lull that we seem to have slipped into.
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Post by Ghost »

Well, at least we have quality over quantity. :|

How about a bonus point challenge from the Judge, use other IBDoF thread items in your narrative:

1) Answer the Modesitt quote, Kilt's 20 questions or other game
2) Utilize a word and then its Anagram
3) Bring into play an Extreme Cuisine
4) Make use of your favorite SF/F quote

I consider any other bonus point proposals.

Highlight your thread item to win and you can only win one bonus point per post. :smash:
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I'm very firmly inclined against the idea of awarding bonus sherlock points.

I was only suggesting that we roll in the point that wasn't awarded last week. Please consider my "double or nothing" suggestion retracted ... I had no intention of inadvertantly re-opening an old can of worms.

My apologies.
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I was not suggesting a bonus Sherlock point but a bonus Post point to help you win the weekly Sherlock point.

I thought that someone had mentioned this concept before. I’ll go check the thread.
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Oh, my mistake. :oops:
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Post by Ghost »

I found it:
kiltannen wrote:I'm also partial to the concept of "Bonus" - these points to be awarded at the sole discretion of the current Judge Roy Bean. [Which of course is most likely to be Ghost...] To be awarded for anything at all deemed worthy of a bonus point, but here's an example that might be worth it.

WITHOUT breaking any of the other rules, and also without making it seem forced - providing the correct answer to a Sherlock asked in some other thread [Even the Quote Game threads...] A case where Ghost might consider it right to award a bonus or summat quite liken to it...

Wattya Reckon?

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I say again, Wattya Reckon?
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