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OK – fixed my old post so it fits on the screen better.

Great posts Brad and Cho :clap: :clap: :clap: , you shouldn’t hold that kind of powerful stuff in for weeks on end – you’ll blow yourselves up :hot: .

I’ll score them soon. :mrgreen:
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I figured you'd like the 930E reference, given your profession and job location :P
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I've still got a partial Pirates of Penzance thing, but it got overwhelming, so I shelved it until I had more time to focus on it. With my mom's stuff going on, I just haven't had the focus I needed.

So, it's there....eventually, maybe it will go up.
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Fantastic posts people!!! :clap: :thumb: :worship:

. . . a tiny cigar-chomping midget . . . sad yet curious . . . awesomely massive 930E Super Dumper . . . their hands below camera . . .

“Phih-UL! Phih-UL! Phih-UL!â€
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/me panhandles for an extra point by shoehorning in a WOTD reference before Cho can think of it.

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Ummmm. Wasn't effusive the word of the day? I think I had it right up at the top. Wuz ah robbed? Ah say, Ah say, Wuz ah robbed?

:(

Edit: Um. yeah. It was the first word of my genre section. Hey!
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Aww damn, Cho beat me to it. :( :slap:

I humbly defer, milady ... didn't notice you'd already nabbed it. :P
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Pirate Queen ChoChiyo wrote:Ummmm. Wasn't effusive the word of the day? I think I had it right up at the top. Wuz ah robbed? Ah say, Ah say, Wuz ah robbed?

:(

Edit: Um. yeah. It was the first word of my genre section. Hey!
You need to bold the WOTD so the judge can see it!
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I was just teasing. It's totally fine.

:P

I forgot all about the word of the day until Brad started teasing me about it. Then I remembered and thought, "Hm. I thought I put that in there." So I went and checked and BEHOLD....so I thought my turn to tease.
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Ghost wrote:You need to bold the WOTD so the judge can see it!
You must remember, folks, that Justice is blind.

Or (around here) merely visually impaired.


Great posts, Brad and Cho :clap: :clap:
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Brad wrote:I figured you'd like the 930E reference, given your profession and job location :P
We had about twenty of those 930Es here for awhile; we’ve shipped them off to another mine the company owns.
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Current Volleyball 2004 Overall Standing:
Brad P: 28 O: 27 E: 28 C: 26 RB: -2 Bonus: 2 TOTAL: 109
felonius P: 25 O: 25 E: 24 C: 23 RB: 0 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 98
Ghost P: 15 O: 15 E: 15 C: 15 RB: 0 Bonus: 5 TOTAL: 65
Aunflin P: 17 O: 10 E: 16 C: 17 RB: -1 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 59
Kahrey P: 12 O: 6 E: 12 C: 11 RB:0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 41
Mrdude P: 5 O: 2 E: 5 C: 5 RB: 0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 17
Cho Chiyo P: 3 O: 3 E: 3 C: 3 RB:0 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 13 Updated: WOTD
laurie P: 3 O: 3 E: 3 C: 3 RB:0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 12
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3


Weekly Sherlock Award for the Week of October 11, 2004

Cho: 5 :clap: :clap:
Brad: 4

From Two weeks ago:

Ghost: 4 :mrgreen:
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Felonius--nicely done! Very crisp images.
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Post by felonius »

Okay - sorry I've been away for so long.

Hope that post isn't too dark for the board but it's in a similar vein to another story I'm tinkering with and I was just going with the moment...will lighten up a bit for my next one, promise... :)
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Well, that was our 2nd suicide contemplation scene ... although I think yours is a LOT better written than mine (which was somewhat tongue in cheek) :P

Well done ! :thumb: :clap:

I have some ideas waiting to be turned into posts, but I'm limited on time at the moment. I'll get to it as soon as I can.
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Excellent, Felonius :clap: :clap:
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Here's a partial list of genres ideas that I've been meaning to flesh out into posts ... I just havent had the time yet:

* Dark Liberals of the Sith (or perhaps a Maxwell Smart / Austin Powers tribute)
* Fanzine Interview and/or IRC Chatlog
* Hollywood Makeover / QE5 (probably for Kong)
* Competative Literary Figureskating
* Gothic Fantasy
* Campfire Stories
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Brad wrote: * Hollywood Makeover / QE5 (probably for Kong)
You could hook that one in with the Oprah Show--after the spin-dry, the clip-n-curl!

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I'm the generous sort ... if anyone would like to sink their teeth into one of the ideas I listed, feel free to dig in. I'm kinda limited on time ATM. :P
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Bad me :whip: , me didn’t score the post last week. :whip:

Excellent felonius! :clap: :thumb:

. . . “Aren’t we all,â€
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Very good, Brad! :clap:

A log in the fireplace popped noisily, punctuating the silence . . . all sorts of flies and midges nipping at our extremities . . . Don’t be a gadfly, sonny

Current: Brad +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Double Entendre - Fireside “Bushwhackingâ€
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Excellent - Cho! :clap: :clap: :thumb: Very funny!

. . . an unfortunate chipper shredder accident . . . cackling git with his ribald off color jokes . . . gave his supervisor the postal meter proctological exam . . . scoop him up with a sponge and a credit card.

Current: Cho Chiyo +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (seance/communication with the spirit world/true confessions), Entertaining +1 (Gotta message for you, chunky), Continuity +1 (very smooth), Rule Breaker + 0 (no rules broken), Bonus + 1 (WOTD) TOTAL: 5

Current Volleyball 2004 Overall Standing:
Brad P: 29 O: 28 E: 29 C: 27 RB: -2 Bonus: 3 TOTAL: 114
felonius P: 26 O: 26 E: 25 C: 24 RB: 0 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 104
Ghost P: 15 O: 15 E: 15 C: 15 RB: 0 Bonus: 5 TOTAL: 65
Aunflin P: 17 O: 10 E: 16 C: 17 RB: -1 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 59
Kahrey P: 12 O: 6 E: 12 C: 11 RB:0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 41
Cho Chiyo P: 4 O: 4 E: 4 C: 4 RB:0 Bonus: 2 TOTAL: 18
Mrdude P: 5 O: 2 E: 5 C: 5 RB: 0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 17
laurie P: 3 O: 3 E: 3 C: 3 RB:0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 12
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genres used: (~98 so far / I know I lost count now)
Action: Action, X-Men
Animation: Japanese Anime, Yu-Gi-Oh, Magic the Gathering
Comedy: Comedy, Slapstick/Odd Couple, Absurdity, Whose Line is it? (see TV), Childish Immature Symbols
Children: Children, Fairy Tale, Little Johnny Joke,
Drama: Drama, Out of Body Experience, International Espionage, A Cop Story, The Mafia, The Twilight Zone
Impressions (Famous Authors): Steven King (see Horror)
Impressions (Literature): Watership Down, Hardy Boys (see Mystery), Good Omens, Tom Sawyer
Impressions (Movies): 1950’s B-Movie Monster Flick, Beach Party, "Men in Black" (MIB), Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle (TMNT), Biker Chicks in Prison, Monster Week
Fantasy: Fantasy, Modern, Contemporary
Fiction: Modern Day, Urban Contemporary, Young adult, Coming of Age, Crime Fiction, Real Life
Horror: Horror, Gothic, Steven King, Sci-Fi Horror, Slasher Movie, Thriller
Mystery: Hardy Boys, Sherlock Holmes
Poetry: an Epic Poem, AD&D Filk, Haiku Duel, Sonnet, Prophecy, Double - Acrostic Poem, Japanese Tanka Verse, Diamante Poem, Skaldic Poem, Dime-Store Doggerel, Nursery Rhyme
Romance: Romance, Vomit-Inducing, Cheesy, Out-of-body Experience (quasi ghost story)
Sci-fi: Sort Of, Alien Encounter, Biotech Thriller, Drama, AI Apologue, Spy: Anachronistic Private Eye, Spy (Secret life of Robert Mitty),
TV: Twin Peaks, Cooking Show, Soap Opera "As the IBDoF Turns", Whose line is it? (Super Heroes), Star Trek TNG (X rated), Inside the Actor’s Studio (Existentialist Parody), Barbara Walter Special, Oprah
Other: Stream-of-Consciousness, Screen Play Script, Flashbacks, Epistolary, Call-in Radio Show, Autobiography, Experimental Story Structure, Story within a Story within…, Diary, Political Debate, Alliteration Ailment, Interior Monologue, Psychiatric Session, Military Epigram, Mad-Lib, Allegory a la Mode, Religious Text, Inaugural Address, Deus ex Machina, Tabloid Newspaper, TV Advertising, Double Entendre, Séance

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Post by ChoChiyo »

Heh heh. Had a minute and couldn't resist.
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Hehehe ... exactly how I'd have acted if I was the ghost :clap: :lol: :cry: :lol:
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Post by ChoChiyo »

You're such a role model for me, Brad....


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Whatever will my mother say???
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