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Cool. :thumb:

However, hopefully someone else goes before then.... :roll:
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Brad's going to spend his time learning how to spell "vengeance". :smash:
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Hello everyone! This thread looks really fun and interesting, however, I find myself without a clue how to join or what to do. Can anyone give me help and instructions - I would love to be part of this excitement and good times!

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Thanks for any help you can give - Keely
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Hi Keely! Welcome to the IBDoF, and also to the Volleyball 2004 competition. This thread is for scoring and commentary about the "tag-team" story we're writing, which can be found (along with the rules of the game) by clicking on

viewtopic.php?t=917&start=0

Hope you join in the fun!
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Anyone gonna go? I've got a hankering to make a VB post...and I can't until someone else goes... :help:
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lauriehonors wrote:Absolutely brilliant, Aunflin! :clap: :worship:

We'll have a hard time livin' up to that one!
I sure hope that is not the case! :shock:
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Over to you, Aunflin :beer:



/me has raspy voice from speechifying :slap:
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Well done, Laurie. :) As a fellow teacher, I think you should aim higher and go for president. :clap:
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felonius wrote:Well done, Laurie. :) As a fellow teacher, I think you should aim higher and go for president. :clap:
Scroll back a page to Brad's "Political Debate" post - 12 years in the future. I've been planning this one for a while..... :)
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Ok - posted. Whew!

/me wipes sweat off me brow. :mrgreen:
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Now I understand your impatience, Aunf :)

It's great !!! :thumb: Our story's back in gear :banana:
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Thanks! :)

However, I am uncertain whether my genre designation for it is really accurate...it's basically set in the "here and now," if a bizarre version of it...so I guess it could be called Contemporary Fantasy...but...

/me shrugs my shoulders... :roll:

Guess I'll just wait on ol' Roy Bean's judgement.
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I don't think the genre is that important at this stage, as long as it's different from the previous one - which yours certainly is. :mrgreen:
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Good job, Aunflin!! :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

I really liked it!
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laurie wrote:I don't think the genre is that important at this stage, as long as it's different from the previous one - which yours certainly is. :mrgreen:
Wrong, so very wrong. :smash: Contempt of court! :smash: Sit down young lady; we’ll deal with your erroneous statement later. :smash: Now back to the scoring.


Very good, Laurie and Aunflin, :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

A clarion call … political one-upmanship … listen to the voices … that's a promise!

Tear the very fabric of reality asunder… notoriously lacking in certain mental faculties … the nightmare images that haunted the Heavens … his too-perfect face …

Current: Laurie +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Inaugural Address), Entertaining +1 (…New York's first woman Governor…), Continuity +1 (meanwhile …), Rule Breaker + 0 (no rules broken), Bonus (n/a) +0 TOTAL: 4

Current: Aunflin +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (??Contemporary Fantasy vs. Modern Fantasy??), Entertaining +1 (…moments of eerie quiet … ), Continuity +1 (back to the story), Rule Breaker + 0 (no rules broken), Bonus (na) +0 TOTAL: 4

Overall Scoring
Brad_H P: 26 O: 25 E: 26 C: 24 RB: -2 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 100
felonius P: 25 O: 25 E: 24 C: 23 RB: -0 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 98
Aunflin P: 17 O: 10 E: 16 C: 17 B: -1 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 59
Ghost P: 11 O: 11 E: 11 C: 11 RB: -0 Bonus: 3 TOTAL: 51
Kahrey P: 12 O: 6 E: 12 C: 11 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 41
Mrdude P: 5 O: 2 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 17
laurie P: 3 O: 3 E: 3 C: 3 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 12
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genres used: (87 so far)
Action: Action, X-Men
Animation: Japanese Anime, Yu-Gi-Oh, Magic the Gathering
Comedy: Comedy, Slapstick/Odd Couple, Absurdity, Whose Line is it? (see TV),
Children: Children, Fairy Tale, Little Johnny Joke
Drama: Drama, Out of Body Experience, International Espionage, A Cop Story, The Mafia, The Twilight Zone
Impressions (Famous Authors): Steven King (see Horror)
Impressions (Literature): Watership Down, Hardy Boys (see Mystery), Good Omens, Tom Sawyer
Impressions (Movies): 1950’s B-Movie Monster Flick, Beach Party, "Men in Black" (MIB), Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle (TMNT)
Fantasy: Fantasy, Modern, Contemporary
Fiction: Modern Day, Urban Contemporary, Young adult, Coming of Age, Crime Fiction, Real Life
Horror: Horror, Gothic, Steven King, Sci-Fi Horror, Slasher Movie
Mystery: Hardy Boys, Sherlock Holmes
Poetry: an Epic Poem, AD&D Filk, Haiku Duel, Sonnet, Prophecy, Double - Acrostic Poem, Japanese Tanka Verse, Diamante Poem, Skaldic Poem, Dime-Store Doggerel
Romance: Romance, Vomit-Inducing, Cheesy, Out-of-body Experience (quasi ghost story)
Sci-fi: Sort Of, Alien Encounter, Biotech Thriller, Drama, AI Apologue
Spy: Anachronistic Private Eye, Spy (Secret life of Robert Mitty),
TV: Twin Peaks, Cooking Show, Soap Opera "As the IBDoF Turns", Whose line is it? (Super Heroes), Star Trek TNG (X rated), Inside the Actor’s Studio (Existentialist Parody), Barbara Walter Special
Other: Stream-of-Consciousness, Screen Play Script, Flashbacks, Epistolary, Call-in Radio Show, Autobiography, Experimental Story Structure, Story within a Story within…, Diary, Political Debate, Alliteration Ailment, Interior Monologue, Psychiatric Session, Military Epigram, Mad-Lib, Allegory a la Mode, Religious Text, Inaugural Address

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Another great week :clap: :clap: 7 volleyball posts! :thumb:

The weekly (run-away) Sherlock winner is:

Aunflin: 16 :clap: :clap:

felonius: 5
Ghost: 4
laurie: 4

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All righty -- anyone gonna have a go at it?
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Well done, Laurie and Aunflin :clap: :worship: :clap: :worship: :clap: :worship:

Ladybooks: welcome aboard. Feel free to jump right in. The only requirement is to have fun. Paying attention to the overall scoring, changing genres, and furthering the overall plotline is strictly optional. :mrgreen:
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Thanks, Brad! Hopefully, we now have the story back on track. :)
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Ok, I guess the "Olympic Literary Figure Skating" post I was pondering can wait for a bit ... :wink:

(the phonetical 'skinny dipthonging' was a bit of a downpayment on that idea) :lol:
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Ok, I posted and it is really, really bad. :slap: I had a brain-fart on Saturday and instead of just letting it go, I bottled it up. :crazy: I brought it with me to work today, I just uncorked it and the post is what came out. :mrgreen:

[SIDE NOTE: Laurie’s: Now for Some Thing Completely Different isn’t even close.]


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LOL Ghost! :lol: :clap:
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Ghost, I'm laughing my ( , ) off!!! :clap: :thumb:
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Ghost: :lol: :lol: :lol:
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Nice one, Judge! :thumb: :D
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