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hgladney wrote:How bizarre, you two both have specialities that, if I run into problems on *this* book, I know where to come asking questions...
Strange feeling. Very cool!

Somehow, I'm still not used to being able to turn around like this to ask things. And yup, I still need to do a longer post on the women's culture.
Sorry it took so long to reply ... work was well being "work" and i got involved with a local amatuer Shakespear group in town . That was kinda funny i was even a sound man today ..lol .. heck I had never even been in a rehearsal before.. they perform next week end too . It was 97 with a heat index of 106 and we did it in a city park in the sun! ohh I did good...

Heather my far friend .. now you can understand Court life all the better. WE are after a fashion rather like Royal advisors from many regions . I like that notion. If I may be so vain..
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asseri said:
...It was 97 with a heat index of 106 and we did it in a city park in the sun...
To which I say:
Yaaargh! Drink lots of fluids!!
Hope it was both fun and interesting--sounds like learning lots of new stuff came with that territory!
Perseverance is more prevailing than violence; and many things which cannot be overcome when they are together, yield themselves up when taken little by little.
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hgladney wrote:asseri said:
...It was 97 with a heat index of 106 and we did it in a city park in the sun...
To which I say:
Yaaargh! Drink lots of fluids!!
Hope it was both fun and interesting--sounds like learning lots of new stuff came with that territory!
Sure did .. weell mostly.. okay maybe not not enough liquids *draging toe in sand eyes cast down*

Actually I didn't realise I was sunburned when I was typing yesterday . LOL but since i sit infront of a fan while I putz on the computer.

but I was thinking how early style plays and such theater groups would go over in all the cultures of Naga's world. that might be a very interesting plot device.
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Yes, it would. And you make a very good point.
I suspect the Upai are pretty easy-going, and wouldn't mind whatever wort o entertainment a traveling troupe might like to offer.
I suspect that the Tanese are pretty tight about it, more because they think it's a way of controlling political attitudes and repressing revolts. BUt the Sek-bloods might be contradictory because some of them are doing well as "official" performers and wouldn't want amateurs spoiling their game ain places like Nella's pleasure house.
The Tannese do have traveling puppet plays for little kids--very Punch and Judy, I suspect--that caravan around to different market and Feast days, with jugglers and magicians and so on. It would make sense if something like medieval mystery plays were put on as well, but nobody's told me about that yet. I suspect that those might be getting done by some of the more disreputable Devotees in certain traveling Orders, who don't agree with the sort of things decided by other, wealthier Orders. There seems to be a gap where very poor peasant-ish types of performers would be, as if that's not allowed, or it's too disorderly for the Tannese nobles to tolerate, or some authority not too long ago put a stop to it (such as Manoloki).
Some performers seem to be segregated in the pleasure houses, such as the Sek-blood farce performers, who aren't quite as fancy or respected as Harpers, but nonetheless command quite a following, and are respected in their own communities. The farce performers in places like Nella's house may be the upper end, the elite, like vaudeville or burlesque or British music hall performers. I also suspect Naga has no idea how high above the general competittive heap he really is, by virture of his Harp training, or how far one could fall if one had to hide that.
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hgladney wrote:Yes, it would. And you make a very good point.
I suspect the Upai are pretty easy-going, and wouldn't mind whatever wort o entertainment a traveling troupe might like to offer.
I suspect that the Tanese are pretty tight about it, more because they think it's a way of controlling political attitudes and repressing revolts. BUt the Sek-bloods might be contradictory because some of them are doing well as "official" performers and wouldn't want amateurs spoiling their game ain places like Nella's pleasure house.
The Tannese do have traveling puppet plays for little kids--very Punch and Judy, I suspect--that caravan around to different market and Feast days, with jugglers and magicians and so on. It would make sense if something like medieval mystery plays were put on as well, but nobody's told me about that yet. I suspect that those might be getting done by some of the more disreputable Devotees in certain traveling Orders, who don't agree with the sort of things decided by other, wealthier Orders. There seems to be a gap where very poor peasant-ish types of performers would be, as if that's not allowed, or it's too disorderly for the Tannese nobles to tolerate, or some authority not too long ago put a stop to it (such as Manoloki).
Some performers seem to be segregated in the pleasure houses, such as the Sek-blood farce performers, who aren't quite as fancy or respected as Harpers, but nonetheless command quite a following, and are respected in their own communities. The farce performers in places like Nella's house may be the upper end, the elite, like vaudeville or burlesque or British music hall performers. I also suspect Naga has no idea how high above the general competittive heap he really is, by virture of his Harp training, or how far one could fall if one had to hide that.
yes , think of the scenes. The plot of a play with in a play .. good ole' Will used that alot. At Pennsic (major SCA event ) they do often have puppet shows and more then 1/2 of the crowd are adults.

" Naga? we need to go . " Drin corsely whispers .
"SHHHHHHH, I want to know what happens next!"
" his wife hits him with a stick .. the crowd will laugh and then she hits him again and so forth "
"really?! .. I want to watch.."
"naga.. ? "
"shhhhh "
"Humph alright "
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When I was a little girl, I made up stories in my head to escape from real life. My number one story line was this: male/male homoerotic stories about an emotionally damaged bodyguard/warrior who serves (and loves/is loved by) a ruler. My bodyguard struggles with two main conflicts:
1. His desire to be strictly obedient and his desperate need to keep his ruler alive
2. His violent nature and his ruler's strong moral code.

All my life I've been reading bodyguard and homoerotic stories looking for something I could relate to. Until your books, I've found only snippets and "has-a-little-that's-kinda-similars.

I'm stunned by your characters and how much I can relate to both of them. I'm intensely grateful for what you've created in these two books.

The books are also beautifully written. Some of your descriptions are jaw-droppingly exquisite. Your use of Hawk as a nickname for Naga is so perfect--at the first mention, I could visualize Naga's power and strength, as well as the tethers and control of his handler. Wonderful imagery.

The drama/angst is intensely moving. I think of Teot's War as being the "character" book, with Naga and Our Liege both beautifully drawn with tons of passion, flaws and heart--everything that makes characters lovable. Bloodstorm is the "plot" book, with a can't-stop-reading series of exciting and intense events. Your fighting scenes are excellent--well detailed and satisfying.

**** SPOILERS ****
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I cried through the entire conflict scene at the camp in Bloodstorm, when Drin is angry, before he gives Naga permission to go kill enemy leaders. First, I thought Drin was being cruel to Naga, but then I considered Drin's POV and understood his pain, too. Wow.
One important comment that I haven't seen anyone else mention: Your books are HOT. I'm not talking about ...
Spoiler: show
the one sex scene with Naga's "wife." The dynamics between the two men is sizzling. From the interrogation scene at the start of Teot’s War, through the camp cot scenes at the end of Bloodstorm... the way Drin pulls out Naga's vulnerabilities and lays them out (lovingly! the bastard!) for inspection... Naga's embarassment and need... YUM. OK, so I may be nearly as twisted as poor Naga :D
, but I doubt I'm the only one having a hormonal reaction to your stuff.

I'm more than eager to find out how you're going to torture our two delightful men next. Please let us know if there's anything your fans can do to keep you inspired to work on the sequels.

Thank you for the wonderful gift of Naga & Caladrunan!
Elaine

[Mod note: spoiler tags added to conceal spoilers. -- Brad]
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clong wrote:I have a couple questions for you about specific scenes in Teot's War. . . WARNING SPOILERS BELOW





















OK, the first scene is Chapter 15, when Naga save Drin from a poisoning attempt (in rather spectacular fashion, I might add).
I lifted my head. "Excuse me, Liege, I must check on something."I gave Pitar a quick look. In a low, calm voice I said "Guard well, Pitar." I turned aside from their alerted faces and up the ramp, past sentries, down the stairs past jostling servants, into the kitchen. Potboys, assistant cooks and table stewards scattered in a shattering din.

One of the killers got away. The other didn't. When I emerged into the hall their was blood on my hands. I knocked aside a yelling sentry pawing for his sword. . .
I LOVED this transition--delightfully jarring. Produced an instant, "Oh, sh*t," reaction. Like most readers, I love to be tormented like this... wondering what's really going on... worried that our liege is somewhere else when the bad thing happened. As a writer myself, I know that occaisionally it's very satisfying to deprive the reader of some information known by your POV character... to give them more excitement.

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ELAINE: Greetings, and welcome aboard ! :)

I took the liberty of inserting spoiler tags into your first post. If you have the time, can you insert them where appropriate into your other post(s) that include spoilers ?

To use it, just edit the desired post, highlight the desired text, and click on the "spoiler" UBB button between subject and message body. It's that easy.

Regards,

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hgladney wrote:I think what you're seeing in both cases are writer's goofs--scenes that I didn't catch the problems well enough...
Or, I could go with the idea that there's so many people in Fortress that, try as he might, Naga's still getting blind-sided by people he's never met before, and that spooks him, which I think was my original intent, and doesn't quite come off.
I could also do both: showing how Naga's spooked by the fact that Caladrunan clearly knows Isaon well but Naga's only seen him once before, there's entire areas of Caladrunan's circle of acquaintances where Naga's got no idea what they've been up to.
Whichever way it is, I needed to do a better job of showing how this is an entire community he's joined, he's starting to get to know who each person is and what they do and where they normally belong.
I disagee strongly on both counts that they are goofs.

One of the best things about the first book is that it had a realistic quality. Naga's not been there long enough to meet everyone important to Drin, and since Iason doesn't get out much, there's no logical reason for Naga to have met him. It's not until Naga goes to Iason's "native habitat" that it is at all logical for Iason to be in the picture.
I must say that it also irritates me when author systematically introduces the main character to characters that'll be useful for the main character to know later on in the book. It makes more sense for the character to find the important characters as s/he interacts with the supporting character's regular environment. I realize that this is one of my pet peeves, though.
hgladney wrote: On the kitchen assassin transition, I think I was trying to stay with the rush of action, with that impression of blurs of people left behind, having everything happen very fast, without taking proper account of whether I've also left the reader back there some where in the confusion!... But he doesn't do that. He goes off into the kitchen. He left the Hall quietly, not making a fuss, and now all of sudden people are screaming and running away.
At the time, Naga is an angsty, trust-no-one, desert-prince-in-exile. He's also a dramatic Harper with a flair for timing. Of course he did things in the most theatrical fashion possible!
This is only one of the many times you used this technique of "leaving the reader in the dark" for very short periods of time, or giving away just enough that the reader is drawn in but has no way of predicting what's happened/going to happen until later. This technique also makes for a higher rereadability factor. That "surprise!" is expertly woven into Teot's War, and less prevelent in the sequel.

I like the tantilizing "what's he doing and why?", and you give enough implications that keep me looking for how I should fill in the rest. It's less fun having things spelled out blow-by-blow. Knowing what to leave out is, I feel, underemphasized in modern sci-fi/fantasy, although a few notable authors have used it well**.

The last time I was in a fistfight, I clearly remember small details - the surprise/shock in his eyes when I ended the fight, and calmly sitting down to resume eating my sandwich and reading my book the moment it became clear he wasn't able to immediately hit back (I didn't feel bad about it - he was a year older and outweighed me). I don't remember how many punches he or I threw, or how I ducked. Naga's attention to inconsequential details during times of stress is what helps make those scenes come alive so well.

The ambiguities and shadowed implications you seem to have deliberately put in is what allows the reader to interact more deeply with the book and gives Teot's a flavor of classical literature.
hgladney wrote:Now, I might add a whole fight scene in there (what I tried at the time seemed to drag too much) or a phrase about the setting or noise, something to cue you that the almond smell that Naga has noticed means somebody's still trying in the kitchen trying to poison other dishes. He doesn't say why he's so sure that it's only just happened, why it couldn't have been done hours ago--perhaps there's kitchen or serving procedural reasons that it would have been noticed after a long enough time had passed.
But some wry statement of a kitchen rule in between those two sentances might have made a good transition in there.
Please no! A fight scene description and kitchen protocol isn't really central to the plot. The fact that the fight took place is.
If I wanted long, drawn out fight scenes, I'd reread Brust's Phoenix Guards*. Also, Naga was likely not close enough to the kitchen until right before the food was to be served. There's no reason for him to have noticed earlier.
I also notice a a further plotline gap after that--who else got hurt? Who else got poisoned? Clearly, the poisoners didn't care much who else ate out of the same dish, so long as they've nailed Caladrunan with the poison. (A very sloppy way to poison someone, as that I think about it now.)
Naga doesn't really comment, he doesn't seem to care in his single-minded focus, but perhaps he just regards all that as a mechanical part of his duty, checking on the distractions and on having an intact guard perimeter automatically, without making much mention of it to the reader. A comment on it would help, perhaps reporting something to Caladrunan, who certainly would ask.
My take is that, to Naga, the only one that matters is Drin. Pitar later says something to that effect, and clearly states what the reader's already been able to see in action. That nonmention, to me, adds to the reader's knowledge of Naga's midset and motivations. Also, it shows that the poisoners have a complete lack of regard for lives (aka collateral damage), and that they would see it as the more dead, the better.

Yea, so there's my pretty vehement push-back. I don't reread too many books; Teot's War was one of the first, and I reread it within a two-day period, which was unheard of for me then.



* Great book in a very different writing style
** Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep? is a great example. Orson Scott Card's Ender/Bean series also has some of those elements.
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The spoiler tags are lovely, Brad. Putting them on looks easy. Does anyone know how to *read* them?

Thanks!
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Just click at the beginning of the "spoilered" text and drag your mouse through the text, and it will be revealed.
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Interesting comments, elaine.q. Somehow, I managed to read the relationship as not being sexual (intense yes, physical, maybe, but not sexual). Maybe I am just avoiding what I don't want to see. . . I have certainly seen other commentary more in line with your views.

Maybe Heather will enlighten us?
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Elaine and cygnet, welcome to the forum, and indeed, thank you!
The shuttle is up successfully, we've found another planet out there in the Oort Cloud beyond Pluto, and all these lovely people are telling me they like what I did the way I did it, and why, and that the guys are teh hotness, and why.
Ahem!! well <fluffing hair> I feel better, I don't know about anybody else round here... Hmmm, ye-ee-ess, I think I could get used to a diet of ambrosia, why do you ask??
Better than chocolate?
Um, well, it's right up there with all the choice things eaten in their proper season when you were dying to have some.
Right now?
Corn of the cob, barbecue, really ripe tomatoes, new potatoes, watermelon, iced tea, and chocolate. (Yes, because chocolate is brown, and so it goes with everything, in all seasons, even when it melts in 107 frelling degrees F, and it goes with most of my clothes. Although more of it, in varied forms, is good in the winter.)
I think positive feedback is right up there with chocolate--good in any season, goes with everything, and it's even better melted.
Right.
Even when it gets stuck in all those long braids.
Elaine hasn't fainted, has she?
Besides, the Tannese seem to lack the climate in which to grow chocolate, and don't seem to have anywhere they import it from.
A shame, really.
They might even regard it as a dangerous drug or spice, given the effects it seems to have on some folks. But I daresay it wouldn't stop Fat Nella from trying it out on some of her more elite guests.
We have lost Elaine for the duration, haven't we?
Umm, right.
Elaine, hello, honey, <pat pat gently> I know, I know, it's rough. There's an entire community out there who know *exactly* what you're talking about. And they're ready to share, probably in *far* more detail than some folks care to hear about.

What? Oh, yeah. Umm, right. Pg-13, remember?

Elaine, you said:
Your use of Hawk as a nickname for Naga is so perfect--at the first mention, I could visualize Naga's power and strength, as well as the tethers and control of his handler. Wonderful imagery.
I was also thinking of the fragility of feathers, of how their bones are hollow--besides the quickness and agility, there's a sort of spareness, a finely tuned quality there, a lack of any extra resources, which I wanted to convey as part of the impression that other people have of him.

Also, in my mind at least there's an association there with Egyptian artwork of the god Ra that is very evocative of the whole desert environment. Other people besides Caladrunan might have spoken of Naga more as an eagle, a much heavier and sometimes ungainly bird, but I didn't want to get tangled up with more recent subconscious imagery, such as Benjamin Franklin talking about smart turkeys vs. dumb fish-eaters as the national symbol, or the more recent heavily overdone American flag imagery--the kind of thing that shows up on velvet paintings at swap meets, shudder.

I was a little concerned that Caladrunan saying, "my hawk" might seem mushy or contrived to folks whose idea of a good nickname is a word that talks about how immovable or massive or quick they are. But if it does seem mushy to the Tannese, Caladrunan is saying it anyway, very deliberately, not embarrassed about it. That says a few interesting things about him. What, exactly, might depend on your take on other things about him.

Technical note: One of the limitations of doing first person is that nobody knows what they themselves look like, especially in a society that doesn't have many effective mirrors. Besides, the first person "looking in the mirror" trick reads so awkwardly. I think Dick Francis is the only one I've read who got away with it, because his characters are so self-deprecating about it.

cygnet, you said:
I don't reread too many books; Teot's War was one of the first, and I reread it within a two-day period, which was unheard of for me then.
Thank you. That is indeed very flattering praise. I was wondering what changed. Do you reread more often now? Is it a matter of experience, finding more writers you like enough to reread?

You also said:
I like the tantilizing "what's he doing and why?", and you give enough implications that keep me looking for how I should fill in the rest. It's less fun having things spelled out blow-by-blow. Knowing what to leave out is, I feel, underemphasized in modern sci-fi/fantasy, although a few notable authors have used it well**.

This is a really great reminder to have right now.
Curt's original question about the transition, with Naga coming out of the kitchen there, brought up the rapid blurry motion effect.
I was considering how to handle that kind of action sequence for a larger sequence of events, wtih more people involved. I think it might be helpful to keep that effect firmly in mind, along with the necessity to keep the reader clued in. I've been dealing, in those last 3 chapters I'm fighting with, with a big battle sequence.
It feels rather like girding up *my* loins to deal with it, honestly. Got yer chest knives? Check. Got yer spurs? Check. Got yer helmet strapped on? Check. Got yer belts tight? Check. Got yer spellchecker?
:shock:
You know how people act when they sit at a fancy arcade game console with a built-in seat, how they carry on? I may not be moving much, but it feels like that same sort of gathered, all-sensors-tuned-in, whole-body concentration.
:evil:
Curt brought up another really good question: Is the relationship between Naga and Caladrunan just platonic, or not?
There's an interesting identification issue going on with the Teot series. I think I've got a handle on something intriguing when I get such radically different reactions from people about it.
Unfortunately, like the lady and the tiger, it's a real biggie. Because there's all kinds of ramifications into the society at large, I replied to Curt at vast and possibly tiresome length, and I would like to crosspost over here, in another post. (You're all warned!!)
Some writers would leave you to speculate out past the end of the series. But guess what? Some people are impatient with writers who pussyfoot timidly away from these issues.

As Curt said above, some folks see the relationship between the two men as very intimate and physical, but platonic. Strongly so, and for very good reasons. I've heard this from folks of either gender, and they have a point: It's nice to see something that insists guys can be friends instead of competitors and rivals *all* the time. And they can be rowdy rough-housing friends without it meaning they'll fall into bed at the slightest excuse.

Other folks think it's about as platonic as exotic leather lingerie.
Elaine clearly needs more chocolate.
I don't know if Elaine even likes it.
Who says she's eating it?
I think she's melting it on--
Shhhhh!

Okay, enough with the whispering!
I'll be perfectly plain, Elaine, those braids are arrogant as all heck and *nobody* ever gives that kind of handle to their opponents unless they are truly and really full of themselves.
And yes, they were *meant* to turn your brain to mush.
In a perfectly open, above-board, and honestly platonic manner.
:butter:
Although, in my own defense, I wrote the books before I'd ever been to a convention, before I knew *anything* whatever about fans or fandom or any subgenres out there.
But now I know a bit more. A bit.
:twisted:
Speaking of fannish kinks, I mentioned here on another thread that one of my current favorite writers was Laurell Hamilton. Blud, monsters, erotic magic, and way too many excessively handsome and perennially horny guys--where can you go wrong? Umm, by sharing too much, perhaps? By getting too stereotypic about how the guys are handsome and what fancy dress they're wearing now? But enough of the snark. How is she getting away with this, when nobody else has? That takes skill, that does. In either of her current two series, if you want loving descriptions of a whole toothsome male harem in fancy leather and occasionally in "grow your own furs", there you are. (It was getting a little too obvious for me, but so far it's working for her.)
She's also writing about obsessions and kinks (I won't assume they're her own personal ones, just that she's writing about these particular ones) such that she's connecting with the folks who relate to it, apparently in large enough numbers that it doesn't matter if other readers are turned off by it. She's managing to connet to a fairly mainstream audience that never knew it might like this stuff. There's a big change in how open people can be about that old taboo, and she's getting away with telling the reader things about BDSM issues that you couldn't say twenty years ago.
She's also been stringing out unresolved erotic tensions for years, and she's selling just fiiine.
So one lesson there may be, tension works for longer than you'd think.
Or perhaps the lesson could be to state bluntly that it's entirely possible for Naga and Caladrunan to be intimate in a very non-sexual manner with this kind of kink added. As it happens, a relationship that involves pain sensors and a skilled whiphand may or may not involve a sexual component. (Folks outside that community assume things that aren't correct about it, as about any other minority group.)
"Do you think your guys are in the scene?" is a question people don't ask quite as often as the queer question--but they do ask.
It's got all of the same problems and violently active buttons as any fannish slasher ever dreamt of.
Yes, I've talked to people who've been in that community since before it was open, let alone popular. They bear the same stigmata that older members of the gay and lesbian communities do, of having lived a hidden and much-shamed life for years.
This too would be very characteristic of such people in Tan, also, don't you think? And do you think Fat Nella could diagnose either of those conditions with a knowledgeable glance or two? I suspect a lot of things would be no secret at all to her.
I don't think I've made Curt very happy with that answer...
It's probably another question that old school sf&f writers would advise me to avoid committing myself on. Perhaps I should say something like, "I'd hate to step on anybody's dreams. Why don't you read it the way you like it, and let other folks read it the way they like it, and we'll all be happy?"
It's not that easy, I'm afraid.
Just to add to the tease, since this post is getting really long (and probably still has typos here and there!) I will add it to another post following this one.
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I've edited here for typos.
Curt said: I never really thought of Naga and Drin's relationship as sexual (intense, certainly, physical, maybe, but not sexual), and yet some readers clearly view your book as a breakthrough in homoerotic fantasy (for example, the latest newcomer to the forums, but I've seen other similar commentary on websites). Am I missing the boat on this?
To which I said:
...the cute answer would be, "Whether *you're* missing the boat depends on who's doing the comments."
The more complex answer is that some people see cues that others don't read the same way, and it can be really interesting to notice the differences.
Long answer:
At the time they were written, there seemed to be *no* possiblity of getting that much published using frankly gay characters except in gay porn. Certainly not something like Kushner's Swordspoint. A few things in these books were pushing it with Ace.

They have a point, too. Some folks slash everything happily. (I have no problem with that viewpoint, handled with some idea of consequences.) But I've read critiques of slash fiction that suggests that ambiguous situations like this one, where there's room for fan interpretation, are actually more to the slash fan's taste than simple outright gay fiction. In Ace's view at the time, those kinds of fans would be happy anyway with it, as it is. And if it stays pretty gen in character, then the folks who don't like that idea don't have to confront stuff that squicks them.

But the whole issue does bring up some serious questions that I haven't really clarified in the first two books.
There's some serious character consequences whichever way you read the relationship between the two men.

As far as public life goes, there's all the usual problems of an authority figure's choice of friends. The Tannese court probably would care more about the disjunct in status between them, as being unsuitable--"Naga's not one of us. He doesn't know the rules. He's rude and he doesn't know how to handle the right people who need flattering. He'll mess up on delicate things. What's wrong with picking your friends among *nice* people? Why doesn't he pick friends among people *we* know?" Lado, after all, is from a rather poor clan also, and whines freely about it.
Caladrunan has just told all those snobs and status-fearful folks to lump it. *Again.*

They rank lower than the two Harpers as far as his time and attention goes, no matter how noble their antecedents. It's enough to make a fancy noble conspire with traitors, I swear it is.

Naga is certainly a favorite, and has to be handled as one, no matter what anybody likes about it. Caladrunan has clearly decided that Naga's quick enough to learn what matters fast enough that he won't mess up on delicate matters all that badly, and also that the court is robust enough to handle the discomfort of such an outsider challenging their assumptions.
(He might rather like that aspect of it, even if it's pretty rough on Naga and those who get challenged.)

The authority figure has clearly decided that his voting block in the Council is robust enough to handle challenges based on envy, jealousy, or frustrated ambitions--some other officers aren't as tired as Pitar is, they might have wanted to become commander of the night watches, for instance, instead of Naga.

All of that is no small issue, if you're trying to run any organization. The status and power decisions involved there seem bigger and more important the longer I've been working in a hierarchy myself. What exactly is Naga's job, who does he report to, who does he have to learn from, who are his subordinates? Whose nose is bent out of joint by the sudden presence of this parvenu?

t's not emphasized all that much in the first two books--but certainly some folks at court at the end of the second book would be asking themselves if the betrayal by Keth is just simple jealousy, or just the natural result of fracturing the court so badly by the disruption of introducing such a forceful and mismatched individual as Naga. They would be gossiping in ways that convey the idea Caladrunan should have expected it, he was so careless with his power base.

In some countries, the power aspect would matter far more than whether the two men were lovers. But in other countries, sex would be a huge added risk of religious or political animus, rather like painting a huge target on your own back and saying, "Shoot me now and get it over with!"
I haven't been specific enough about Tan's political and religious structure to judge whether it goes to either of these extremes, but I suspect in a colonial power like this, the native vs. high-born noble aspect trumps a lot of other things. "He didn't go to the right school!" No kidding!

It's certainly an issue that any power figure as careful as Caladrunan is would have to think about if he decides to indulge. I don't think there's anything in the books that suggest he's careless about such things.

Besides, that [character flaws such as boinking the wrong person] may be very common, but it's such a boring and disappointing character flaw to see. We're already too familiar with figures of authority who get so arrogant that, even when it's a very bad idea, simply don't bother to keep it in their pants. Boooring.

So I can also understand folks who, following this chain of logic, would be very dismayed to be told "the two are lovers in spite of everything, and they don't care who knows it." It isn't purely being squicked about homosexual behavior that bothers them in that case--it's the rampant carelessness about all those other consequences, the political fallout.

Then there's some huge personal ethics involved in this if either or both of the guys are gay or bixesual. This has nothing to do with "Christian ethics", and everything to do with the Great Oath.

First of all, how would you go about asking the other guy if your gaydar is right, and how about going dancing on the weekend? Just *asking* is a bit of a problem.
:shock:
Can Caladrunan actually ask something like this of a soldier sworn to his service? It'd be perfectly legitimate in the law, he can literally ask anything he wants to, under the Great Oath.

But Naga has no choice about obeying the request.

Now, I realize some of the kinkier BDSM folks love that kind of thing.

But how well does that fit with Caladrunan's view of free will?

Big no-no. In Caladrunan's mind, he can't. It might be against Naga's own free will--and just making a mild suggestion is sufficient to make it a command. Naga might be obligated to pretend he likes the whole idea no matter what he thinks, which is Just Wrong. So, under Caladrunan's strict ethical standards, he simply can't ask. I suspect Caladrunan goes way out of his way to avoid invoking the Great Oath, even when he'd really love to smack down that smartaleck Harper mouth just *once*. But no, the only time he'd do it would be if he assessed some very high risk of motality, where he *must* command Naga to do as he's told.
(Naga probably has plenty to say about it under those circumstances, too, which doesn't exactly make it easier to do next time.)
:hot:

Then there's all the problems if you turn the chessboard round the other way. All that pride--would Naga even begin to admit that he wants anything, if it smacks of trying to ingratiate himself, or weasle his way into Caladrunan's trust, or earn favors? He doesn't like the mythic image of LOTR's Grima Wormtongue--he'd bend over backwards to avoid appearing to be that character.

Also, the fits are humiliating. Who'd choose to let your boss see you like that? Would you court any further chances of it?

A lot of folks would vanish every chance they got, just to avoid the risk of havig another random epileptic seizure in front of the boss.

So it's quite striking that Naga stays so close to Caladrunan, he's there on his own time, he doesn't make excuses to disappear. He has various work-related reasons for that, making sure Caladrunan is safe, but he seems to just like being there. Some at court would accuse him of being just another power-sucker (sort of like vaccuums, you know) who gravitate toward authority figures, and he'd probably bend over backward to avoid looking like that, too.

Does he want something? Or does he just enjoy Caladrunan's company more than that of most other people he knows? Is Caladrunan just an inherently cool person to hang out with?

I don't know that I gave a lot of evidence for that, either, though I suspect he's very good at the meet and greet thing.
("Hello, I'm the Kingie, and I'm pretty good with getting messes sorted out, too.")

Then there's problems with fan responses if I get dogmatic about how things are, one way or the other.

Some people do read it as a sexual or near-sexual relationship very clearly--some like it that way, while others see it that way in spite of themselves, because it bothers them a whole lot, they don't like it.

One fan reported that her mother read it and said, "Are they gay or something? Why is the short crazy guy always losing his clothes?"

Which made me laugh, because *I* tend to think of Naga as the sort of guy who never takes off his armor, sleeps in his boots, and hates being dragged off into the bathing room--it might show where he's got his weapons stashed away!! In my mind, he's about the last guy in Fortress who'll get sweet-talked into doing something silly with his clothes.

But it doesn't mean he doesn't get asked, a lot. That challenge alone might actually get him a lot of pesky attention he doesn't like from those folks at court frantic to prove their powers, or score points, or something.

And I don't think he's buying any of that. He probably could, if he wanted, have a lot of flings, and he could use all kinds of various excuses for it. He might not even bother to mention it as important to him, if he thinks it's trivial. Sort of like, "washed car, took dog to vet, dropped in at parties a b and c--boring, all--and bonked Ladies X,Y, and Z."

His buddy Lado certainly seems to get away with all kinds of unspecified nonsense that nobody seems to punish him for. They just tease him a lot, but it's also unclear just what Lado the flirt is actually doing with his girlfriends, and what the consequences might be.

I've also seen people comment that the unadmitted gay passion thing gets really old, just get it on and get it over with and move on (presumably to other boyfriends, which could lead to amusing security complications indeed), and the endless tease is just boring. (!)

Other folks don't think the wild thing has happened and [it] isn't going to, even if they'd *really* like to believe it. Some slash fans who've read it comment that it's pretty intense already, there's a lot of pressure on the two men in ways that tend to forge friends into a committed couple, and there's a lot of trust there already, so if anything sexual was going to happen, it'd already have blown up in front of you. And it hasn't.
Blink.
Erm.
I mentioned that it was pushing boundaries a bit as it was?

Then there's a fan contingent who really like a brotherly relationship, where the concern and willingness to act on another's behalf doesn't depend on some ulterior motive like sexual gratification. In their view, the power issues involved in Naga's gaining so much influence so suddenly are more than enough to deal with, thank you.

But there is a good point there. In many fictional snapshots of erotic relationships, there's all kinds of angst and fear and obsession and sweaty visuals, but not often much proof of compassion or tolerance or just plain old courage to face up to the other person's faults and your own. Siblings are seen as much more willing to do this, in fiction--but from what I hear people say [in real life], long-term committed relationships are far more about the tolerance and the toe-to-toe daily courage than they are about sexy visuals. I think it can be much more interesting, done right. So, either way I chose to write it, why would I leave out the nonsexual, daily relationship, brotherly aspects of it?

Curt said:
I do think that for me as a reader, having the relationship turn sexual would "cheapen" it.
To which I replied:
In good news, we think we've got the wireless connection problem fixed--yeahh!!
And thanks for your patience with a meandering answer, there.
It's a very good question in the first place, because there are so many ramifications from it. I left out a few others, too.
"Not cheapening it" covers a huge amount of territory in terms of gang politics and guy interactions and power relations.
The cultural differences on what's okay and what's not vary tremendously, more than most people realize. The way *you're* reading it, you may be tolerantly allowing for more variation between our ideas and Tannese ones of what's brotherly and nonsexual than someone who's assuming that level of intimacy (massage such as neck and back rubs, for instance) automatically means continuing the spectrum into sexual contact.

If you're touching somebody at all, in American terms, you're pretty close up on them, you're very intimate. What is acceptable varies so much in families, let alone in cultures, but it's also partly based on our high level of technology, which allows a pretty high level of privacy in many respects.

The Tannese don't have nearly the same insulation going on. They may be pretty distant compared to some of the native communities on things like interpersonal space and the spacing of chairs (hey, they *have* chairs, not just benches!) and the sizes of rooms.

But by our standards, it's a *whole* lot of "Too Much Information!"

In this imaginary country, if you have tummy problems that mean you have to stop the entire riding party to visit the bushes every twenty minutes, we all know it. If you are allegic to shellfish, we know that too. If the Lord of Tan wants to bathe every night, we know all about it, we can hear the pipes gurgling, even if we're not the ones who have to heat up the water for it. Most laundry in Fortress might get thrown in some sort of watermill-driven mangle and then dried on racks by the ovens in the winter, but it's some live person who hauled it out of the chamber and over to the winch basket, or worst of all, personally carried it right down the tower stairs. The housekeeper and laundry for the royals might be a special section all their own, proud of how rigorously they were selected for discretion, very well-known to commanders like Pitar and Naga. But you can imagine the pressure there to sell information: They *know*.

There's village-style accountability on other scales, too. The amount of food going in and out of the kitchens gets counted, rigorously, in properly-run Holds. However, special arrangements with guys who've done it for years, and the unspoken corruption there, could not be questioned at all easily, either. "Just don't ask about Big Louie, okay?"

It's a small town in a lot of respects. If you don't show up for class, the parents will be hearing about their kid skylarking around the daily market, and asking the tutor what's going on. If you're trying to court a friend's sister against the wishes of their parents, the entire neighborhood probably knows it. They may be conspiring with the parents against you, instead of helping you out, too--be ready for that leg thrust out to trip you as you're running away. Yes, you knew Lado was good at dodging and ducking, but he's even more athletic than most readers realize!
In that context, too many people know whatever is going on, and if it isn't socially acceptable, they'll fuss about it. Loudly.

Another sort of reader might assume that what's there already implies that sexual contact would be okay too, as part of the trust spectrum. The two guys are already inside the physical boundaries implied by a culture that uses bladed weapons. They're already in each other's pockets. Anything more personl is just more of the same.

But the Tannese are not easygoing about actual sexual contact. From somewhere in their history, certainly involving their initial contact with the Sekblood court, they have some history of STDs that they've handled by setting up pleasure house contracting. You can buy your mistress or your Kehran boy, you can have more than one, but they can't share it about if you've picked up something nasty. They're yours forever after that. They can be executed, and their extra lover with them, if we catch them cheating. (Yes, it's grossly unfair.)

The Tannese have all these fussy rules about primogeniture and avoiding disease and contracts with pleasure women, so it'd be strange if they aren't equally complex about the less obvious, unspoken rules for other kinds of contact. With commercial pressure brought to bear, the actual laws might be especially strict about arrangements that try to dodge paying for pleasure house contracts and might spread STDs, as this risk is what justifies the entire pleasure house contract. I can't see the pleasure house legal beagles going for any rules allowing partners to be in long-term committed relationships that weren't arranged through the pleasure houses. They might harass people trying to do this. Money certainly talks, but it's possible the houses aren't powerful enough to get the final say about that. I don't know if there's be enough counter-pressure to allow such an exception to the general commerical arrangements. Fat Nella is pretty powerful, but she's also smart; she might tell the beagles to lay off because she knows it won't impact her business, those committed folks wouldn't be buying her wares anyway, and if she's clever, they may instead come to her for help sorting out the legal stuff.
Yes, special interests...

As for trampling on Tannese rules out of ignorance or arrogance, Naga may be breaking all kinds of rules and doesn't even know it, shocking everybody. My suspicion is that he's more aware than most people of what the unspoken rules are. If he's just learning new rules, then either he'll be very quick to pick up on the problem and avoid breaking those rules in future, or else decide to go on as he began, as the single allowed spectacular exception, but it would make him nervous.
Not a fun bunch of people, all in all.

At a more sophisticated level, a reader might be seeing a double message, where anything the guys do would be carefully thought-out to look acceptable and innocuous, but be loaded with repressed homosexual tension. If it's not okay to be queer, then your public gestures--and Caladrunan leads a thoroughly public life, even in his private chambers--have to be carefully edited.

In such a society, even if it's a simple gesture of brotherly concern, or of trying to ensure basic competence at self-defense, then they'd still have to be careful not to appear to be inappropriately sexual.
Round and round we go!

I'm not going to say that the problem is entirely in *our* heads and not in *their* heads. I think, if anything, the Tannese are a lot more screwed up on all kinds of odd fronts in granting "The Other" basic rights and respect, coming so recently from that history of displacing and stomping on the Sek-bloods, and even more recently, the general "conservative" recoil back toward it which Manoloki took advantage of.

I may not be allowing for just how screwed-up Naga would be about himself, as a native trying to function in a colonial (not even post-colonial) power such as the Tannese court. They aren't nearly to the point of "black is beautiful" stage of reclaiming self-respect against exterior demeaning experiences. It would be dangerous and often humiliating to live in the Sekblood community, unless you'd become very powerful indeed.

Naga has graduated far somewhere past the point of being the baddest gang pachuco on the block, somewhere to being the godfather or something; but he'd still be very aware of threats, and how to handle them with the least effort. *Any* questions about his personal life are a huge threat. Asking him what kind of womanly attributes he looks at--not even approaching the question of what kind of woman servant to send him at parties, or what his wife is like--is disrespecting him. They'd expect him to be insulted that anybody was questioning any aspect of his personal life. The Sek are very familiar with the rules for authority figures: If he wants them to know, he'll tell them. If he didn't tell them, it's none of their bidness.
This would be very familiar turf, after dealing with Nandos all his life.

I mean, if you imagine catching Naga in a more ghetto aspect, coming from a refugee-camp, Nando sort of mood, then it's an instant incitement to start a fight, demanding that he prove himself, stand up to defend his machismo. The best answer would be a total deflating joke about the challenger's lack of same, which gets the rest of the gang laughing, and then agreeing. He's got to have become very good at deflecting stupid young "gunslingers" challenging him to fights, without totally destroying their egos--earning their respect enough to come round and enlist on his side. They could be part of his army, if he handles them right.

At a more Tannese noble level, it's still an insult to demand some kind of answer of him, as if he can't be trusted to do the right thing about it. That's a serious insult to his honor, and that's all he's got. And he'd still have to be really good at deflecting those kins of glove-smacking duel challenges.

Then there's a quality of self-respect that's hard to quantify.
They are so much of their setting that I'm having trouble translating them into contemporary terms, into examples that seem current.
But imagine yourself *asking* either man, point blank, if they're lovers.
Blink.
Erm, no.
In a similar power structure in our society, the only people asking that woul be trying to tear down their authority and suggest failings (such as Caladrunan's unwise poisouns cousin, or Keth Adcrag's buddies), and of course it would have to be smacked down pretty briskly.
(Okay, the only known character I can think of who'd *do* it is Great-Aunt Agtunki, and she kind of already did that. She was left to imagine whatever she already thought, which pleases her just fine, and *that* preserves domestic peace a little better. Sneaky man, Caladrunan.)

I can imagine certain sorts of nobodies might ask it, horrifying everybody around--the potwasher or the tanner's kid who asks about gossip, asks things everybody wants to know, but nobody else would dare speak up to say.

The results for them would be unexpectedly massive, of course.
"You are in for *such* a beating, what your father will say I can't think, don't you ever do that again, I'm just so sick I can't tell you, and I don't care *what* nice man gave you a jade chip to ask that horrid question, you don't dare take that to market, for all we know it was stolen and we're all going to be arrested for thieving, you just gave that jade chip over to the Lord's people to look at all they liked and you know they think it was stolen! You and your big mouth! You know the Lord didn't have to promise that we wouldn't be taken off to jail for insulting him--what if he'd taken offense? You don't know what it was like in the old days, you know he could do anything he liked about it! Anything! And then you couldn't even tell them a thing about who gave you that jade chip, don't you pay any attention when people tell you things?"
It's enough to make you feel sorry for the poor family...

There might also be a question like that from the kind of bluff outspoken undiplomatic sort of authority, a Hold lord perhaps, who'd ask it during local visits. Probably not bluntly during meetings at Fortress, among other people of his own rank, but that depends more on the person's own level of unpolitic and even autistic-like bluntness, as well as depending on what's publicly acceptable. You can see fellow Hold lords all wincing from here...

In both those cases, I can see Caladrunan coming out with something really funny and charming, acknowledging their curiousity without granting that they have any right to ask, noting some of the ladies' flattering comments about Naga that have been floating round in the general gossip (to which they all get a general Teot glare that amuses everybody) along with the gentle suggestion that perhaps Naga's own preferences might not be along any of those lines at all, since he does have ties and obligations among his own people.
And he could anticipate a blistering Teot earful later, I'm sure...

There's the simple notion that Naga's obviously the kind of guy who thinks it's nobody's bidness but his. Too many people already know what's going on, or not, and it's nobody else's business what either of them are doing.
Defending his pivacy is hard enough in the village atmosphere already! Pitar and the guards and the spymaster and a whole bunch of other folks already know about it, probably in excruciating detail, and if you can't trust them, who can you trust to do the right thing? And who else needs to know? (It's not like you're going to be able to hide your affairs from the Secret Service, or the laundry ladies.)

Naga himself might be confronted with blunt questions far more often than Caladrunan is. He might crack a joke about being asked--and you could see him using some performance at Nella's to dispel this kind of gossip, once he learns of it--with a joke that carries the clear message that it's nobody else's business. Even if he was being asked to do things he absolutely hates, it's *still* nobody else's business. He might set up the joke to look at first like he's talking about going to bed with his boss, but break it that he's actually talking about how the Great Oath requires him to be polite at diplomatic parties and allow Caladrunan eat fish paste dainties, Despite The Risks. Who knows, maybe a hostess or three will take the point that the royals don't want to have fish paste thrust upon them!
Which doesn't answer the question at all, you notice.

There's also all kinds of racist stereotypes that have to be beat down if you want to say they're queer. It's too appropriate, given the colonial overlord history of the Tannese themselves. That threat might have to be addressed in the joking, too. Some guys would find it humiliating that it even comes up, that anybody could even *think* they were gay. I mean, on top of being shorter and slighter than everybody else, it's just too much! This evokes the old racism idea here that small Asian guys are all queer, particularly compared to the big buff blonde Tannese. But suggesting somebody is queer is the same as unthreatening and powerless has been used a lot as yet another way of emasculating your underlings--and yet also contradictorily making them into a looming threat.
:roll:

Suggesting that Naga is totally straight but in love with Girdeth instead, just causes other problems. Quite a few of Oaur Felloah Amehrakinz would be deeply offended at the idea that Naga might lust after Caladrunan's sister Girdeth, or vice versa.
This threat of miscegenation would also bother the Tannese a lot. Naga might think that it should be addressed in some joking too.
The delicate part would be to suggest that while big leggy blondes are all very well, it isn't exactly to his taste, without saying demeaning or insulting things about all of them, and about her in particular. It might backfire if he attempts it via a fairly standard, "You know, I hate to break it to ya, but not everybody thinks you bossy Tannese are the greatest thing since the Conquest."
I'm not sure if a reversal would work, but perhaps he might praise her extravangantly, so they start getting nervous, and then do some contrast with himself, so he makes it clear that being around so much splendor doesn't exactly make him feel relaxed and compentent and sexy and ready to jump her bones. But that might be a little too bluntly addressing the fact he can *have* desires.
He might have to start off by saying he's uncomfortable when people just suggest he can have any desires at all (he's tiiiired!) let alone speculating who he lusts after. That'd be playing the much put-upon native who doesn't *need* any more big hairy problems thrown on his plate.

For the Tannese, such performances might be pretty edgy, pretty topical, pretty advanced, something like listening to a Sekblood farce performer using material that's tailored more for their own people out on the street, practicing before they ever get inside the pleasure houses, instead of bowdlerized for the rich Tannese nobles inside the house.

Naga wouldn't make a comfortable comic for them, that's for sure. I do like the idea of showing him at work in a performance, addressing some of these jokes. I think I've even got a decent place to add them in, which would actually make one rough transition work a little better, fairly deep into the current structure of the book. (It might end up in a part 2 type of deal.)

But that doesn't address those questions in the first part!

I'm just not entirely sure about my ability to construct jokes that will appear to do all that *both* the Tannese fictional audience, and for the readers who are getting a "translation" of it.

And finally, there's the impatient reader question. They want an answer to this one, one way or the other, and playing delicate "have it your own way" games isn't going to satisfy them, either.

Curt said:
I'll say one thing for you Heather, you sure don't skimp on answering questions!
I've been trying to think about how I would feel if Drin was a Queen instead of a King (i.e., is my "cheapening" comment about homosexuality or not). I think I would feel the same way, but I can't say for sure. I kind of like the idea that two men could be intimate without sexuality (intimacy is an important issue for me). Anyway, it may be best for you to leave readers guessing!

To which I said:
Hee!
So you really wanted to read all thaaaaat muuuuch, right?
Sigh.
...I also think it doesn't begin to address the difficulties and taboos and huge headaches that I went into some detail about while talking to you.
And dancing between the two, refusing to answer the question, doesn't cut it either!

Then I thought about it some more, and replied further:
I like your comment here about whether it would still apply if the ruler were a Queen instead--and yes, I think a lot of the same concerns would apply, if anything, even more so. [later note: The power concerns would be even greater.]

Think of some of the comments made about Queen Victoria and her "inappropriate" servants, later in life after Albert had died.

...Also, thank you *very* much for pasting my Practchett comments over there on the Pratchett forum, extremely helpful!!--and yes, I hared off doing other things somewhere around then. :worship:
A big thankyou-kissy icon would be well-deserved! :D :P
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I don't think I've made Curt very happy with that answer...
It's probably another question that old school sf&f writers would advise me to avoid committing myself on. Perhaps I should say something like, "I'd hate to step on anybody's dreams. Why don't you read it the way you like it, and let other folks read it the way they like it, and we'll all be happy?"
It's not that easy, I'm afraid.
Just to add to the tease, since this post is getting really long (and probably still has typos here and there!) I will add it to another post following this
one.
yeah I blame the chocolate for the loooonnnggg reply. The relationship is one that enables them to survive . They are more whole together then apart. I know a lot of men and women in one part of the Military or another and they can get really close to each other ..it not sexual but it as intimate as their marriages. Being that kind of close to a "friend" is not how modern culture is .

I see American culure as being so repressed that we see the unseamly elements in the morning oatmeal . It is warm gooey and has an earthy smell, it might give you the wrong impression inthe morning!

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gasp--OATHMEAL??
<grin!>
But yeah, very good point, asseri! Thank you, that makes a great deal of sense--and I think it's a kind of old-fashioned commitment--not always long-term, but often it takes time to develop--where people really do long for that, and currently, don't often find it. I mean, too often instead you run across situations that throw you together wth people who drive you bonkers instead.
Also, asseri, you're very good at getting to the point in a few words!! Somehow you deal with it in a sentance, and I grope my way into it through...umm, I've lost track of how many paragraphs that long post was...
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hgladney wrote:gasp--OATHMEAL??
<grin!>
But yeah, very good point, asseri! Thank you, that makes a great deal of sense--and I think it's a kind of old-fashioned commitment--not always long-term, but often it takes time to develop--where people really do long for that, and currently, don't often find it. I mean, too often instead you run across situations that throw you together wth people who drive you bonkers instead.
Also, asseri, you're very good at getting to the point in a few words!! Somehow you deal with it in a sentance, and I grope my way into it through...umm, I've lost track of how many paragraphs that long post was...
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Why thank you for the compliment! I am at heart a rambler myself but in this modern age I find I have a hard time following the print on the screen . When I write I have to make a hard copy to effectively edit .

Now we dont need to go over how when I went to school they stopped teaching grammer persay,' If one can speak proper English one can write it " NOT
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** Chocolate
"Elaine clearly needs more chocolate."
No. More Naga & Caladrunan. <Bowing respectfully, so as not to nag.>

** Hawk
The beautiful fragility is also splendid counterpoint to the fierceness.

** Mush
"And yes, they were *meant* to turn your brain to mush."
I’m pleasantly not surprised. Sweet of you to console me, when you’re the author of my (wonderful) torment. :wink:

** The Sex Question
“Can Caladrunan actually ask something like this of a soldier sworn to his service? It'd be perfectly legitimate in the law, he can literally ask anything he wants to, under the Great Oath. But Naga has no choice about obeying the request. Now, I realize some of the kinkier BDSM folks love that kind of thing.â€
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This is one of the best descriptions I've ever read of how the submissive process works in a b&d situation. Thank you very much for going into it so carefully for us.
The problem is to make it clear to people who don't feel the same way that it really is that strong a drive, for those people who are wired this way.
Some of the folks in the scene seem to give the rest of us the impression that people are at either extreme, either one or the other--dom or submissive--but in more subtle daily interactions, I've gained the impression that there are relative levels of it. Levels of dom-ness, say.
To use the situation in the books, to a lot of scrubby little Nandos, for instance, Naga is the biggest baddest dom they ever met. He's used to functioning in that manner. He's never thought of himself as being in the least submissive at all. (I suspect his trainer Reti had some interesting views about that, too, but Reti didn't explain it, did he?)
It seems to take Naga by surprise that somebody else knows enough to turn it around on him, and do it right, so he has to go along with it. He swore the darned Oath, and he regards himself as bound by it, and that's that. It never occurs to him to shrug off that Oath.
He got lucky that he ran into Caladrunan first, instead of somebody else at court who knew exactly what they were looking at, who knew just where the levers were, and what to do with them, and had far less hesitations about using them.
I think, by the second book, he may have some dim sense of just how lucky he was.
Partly, he just hadn't met that many people at all.
He's only met a very few others he respects enough to trust at all, and none as much as he comes to trust Caladrunan--and it's not in the sense of foolish pride or arrogance or even plain old courage. In his case, the respect is based on his judgement of their inner ethical strength: He can trust they give good advice, they can be trusted to do the right thing morally.
I think you're right about this aspect trumping whatever gender is involved, because I'm certain that he would have no problem at all saluting a Queen with this same sense of justice.
The only other one he's known was Reti, who was just spooky. There's a curious sense there that Naga respected Reti enormously, but dared not relax around him--his job then was to learn, all the time, as fast and hard as he could, and letting down enough to relax wasn't part of the program.
And the strangest part is that Reti seems to have explained so little. Or else he said them in a way that might germinate later on, but Naga wasn't really getting it as a teenager. But then, Naga was probably so mad he was refusing to hear it!

elaineq said:
Naga keeps a wall between his pride and his vulnerable/submissive side. Though he acts (dramatically) from his submissive need, he doesn’t allow himself to understand it.

Oh boy, have you got it right on that one! A lot of heavy-duty machismo types do this, everybody thinks of them as natural doms, and yet they belong to larger hierarchies that take advantage of their need to belong. Such groups often starve them of the feedback and support that they crave. Perhaps that's to make them value it enough to jump through yet more insane hoops to get what they really need, or perhaps it's just because of what I think of as a classic Midwestern terror of offering anybody any positive feedback.
(I think particularly of Garrison Keillor's comic routines when this one comes up).
So they never quite experience what you might call the real dogpack sense of belonging. They can go for years without being forced to deal with it, unless there's something going really wrong with the organization or their place in it. It takes even more serious problems in their private lives to make it surface so other people know about it.
Most often, nobody *wants* them to confront their inner "weaknesses" (as they might regard it) partly because it can get so ugly, and possibly because if they do confront it and figure out how to give that part its natural due, then they can't be exploited the way they used to be, dragged round by all kinds of things that they don't understand.
Which may be why Caladrunan is pushing Naga to face it: to free him. For real.
The problem being that everybody else will fuss at Caladrunan about it: leave him alone, it'll all just blow up in your face!
I think you've got a lot of other good points too, but I will close for now by saying thanks again, it's extremely interesting and enlightening.
So, elaine, when are you writing *your* book?
Insights like this, hey, we wanna see it!
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** Naga's relationship with Reti
I was hoping some of the flashback you'd mentioned would deal with Reti. I'd love to see how Naga learns his craft and how he handles his frustrations with his mentor (and how his mentor handles Naga's frustrations).

** Leadership
Many people who don't think of themselves as submissive would enjoy and benefit from an encounter with a person who could bring it out of them. Unfortunately, there's a dearth of good leadership. That's a gross understatement. Most of what passes for leadership is narcissism and/or self delusion. It takes a lot of empathy to lead well.

Caladrunan is a strong empathetic leader. Perhaps a master manipulator could have tricked Naga into giving his submission by pushing the right buttons. I think Caladrunan earned it from Naga by understanding/accepting him and caring for him. Perhaps also Naga is attracted to Caladrunan's fairness and moral rightness. Even though Naga doesn't appear to embody these, he recognizes that what was done to his people was wrong and that wrongness is important to him.

In the business world, I learned to manage people by studying (the large number of) those who do it badly. I started with a humanistic perspective--that you don't have to abuse people to get them to perform--but I believe that even if you don't give a damn about people, empathetic management is still the best way to run an organization. It produces loyal teams that grow and expand their skills, and take pride in doing their best work.

Unfortunately, most leaders are either empathetic without strength or strong without empathy (bullies), neither of which brings out the best in people.

Warriors usually aren't masters of empathy, so their leaders (promoted warriors) tend to be bullies. I think a warrior personality like Naga is perfectly paired with a high-empathy leader like Caladrunan, who can direct his energy into something more useful than just killing everyone who pi**es him off.

** Getting any sleep?
The times of your postings suggest sleep disorders. Hope you're taking care of yourself!

Elaine

P.S. I've had to take a break from my own writing, but I hope to get back to it soon.
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elaineq said:
I'd love to see how Naga learns his craft and how he handles his frustrations with his mentor (and how his mentor handles Naga's frustrations).
This is another great suggestion. It's odd, but I haven't really got a thorough, tangible flashback about Reti. I have references to Reti as Naga explains to other people what Reti used to do, but it's not internal. That's a strange gap. It's as if that's walled-off too. My suspicion is that he never really let himself look at or think about Reti's death, which happened in his absence. He just kept going. Not surprising, given previous experience of nursing his harp trainer, Tomu, until Tomu died of cancer. He doesn't talk about that either, unless he's forced to it, such as Keth's accusations before the end of the second book. Tomu seems to be smaller, more human, warmer, crankier, more temperamental figure than Reti. Not a twin pillar with the far larger figure of Reti (and I'm not sure why they'e not equals in Naga's mind), but still important. Naga doesn't comment about having left Tomu's training far behind, but the way Lado has challenged him in basic harp skills, surely he has grown a long way past what Tomu could do. He doesn't ponder about that very much, either.
Reti seems to loom like a colossus over everything, to color everything Naga knows and believes, and yet Naga has no sense of perspective about him, very little sense of growing away from Reti's ideas, and he doesn't talk about him often, he doesn't seem to re-examine what Reti taught him all that much. Part of this could be because so much of it is nonverbal, based in movement-training, or it could be that he doesn't go very conscious about it when he does change what he's doing with his own movements or in looking at trainees. I'd like to show him doing more of that basic work, anchoring it by showing some of the work in daily routines. That might be a good place to comment on some of this.

Naga gives a few flickers of disagreement with Reti on matters of tactical or strategic judgement as an adult, but he hasn't grown away from that looming figure, Reti hasn't been seen as a fallible fellow adult, somebody he might diasgree with if he was still working with Reti. I can visuallize a sort of vivid snap realization that Reti came of an era and a situation that is quite different, so Naga blinks into understanding that Reti might not have adapted very well to the particulars of the battle that Naga is planning for. There'd be a lot of repressed energy building up toward something like that, and then it blows loose--possibly, a lot of shouting!
Unexamined, myterious, and pretty frustrating, Reti remains nearly invisible in spite of being so powerful. Very odd.
I had assumed that the loss of two primary parental figures, both Reti and Tomu, would get tightly coupled to the loss of Naga's clan as a kid, but that just makes it all the more astonishing that he bonds with anybody after that. It has to be an incredibly powerful push to make him do that.

Of course any threat to Caladrunan's life (and gradually, threats to the lives of other people Naga cares about, such as Lado or Girdeth or Vopi or Therin) have become tied into the unresolved pain of losing people. In an era of poor medicine, others have all lost loved ones too, so where does he get off making it into *such* a big deal? I mean, get on with your life, right? Not that easy. And yes, I coud indeed see this turning into *such* a howling rage if he sees any of these people doing foolish, risky things that he's already objected to.

elaineq said:
...empathetic management is still the best way to run an organization. It produces loyal teams that grow and expand their skills, and take pride in doing their best work.
Thank you!! YES!! I'd been thinking about governing styles, aside from politics in general, and one of the points of showing a leader like Caladrunan is showing *how he does it*. "Here's a model to work from, here's how to do it right!" Giving some sort of role model is exactly what a lot of good fiction does. Yet I also hadn't been showing this directly, either. It's all sort of incidental--"yes, of course he does it all the time, and here's a glancing look at it while we're busy with other things". For one thing, it's more realistic and convincing that it's common, everyday real life approaches. I haven't really shown him losing his temper, either; he seems to be inhumanly laid-back and patient, and somehow, I don't think he would be all the time...

Then elaineq said:
Unfortunately, most leaders are either empathetic without strength or strong without empathy (bullies), neither of which brings out the best in people.
Warriors usually aren't masters of empathy, so their leaders (promoted warriors) tend to be bullies. I think a warrior personality like Naga is perfectly paired with a high-empathy leader like Caladrunan, who can direct his energy into something more useful than just killing everyone who pi**es him off.

:lol:

Oh boy, right again. Excellent points, all. Either extreme of the undersanding/weak and the strong/total-oafness is incredibly hard to work for.
And where'd Caladrunan learn to be so good at it? The stories that the Upai told him? His scary Great Aunt Agtunki? Or, as you said, turning all kinds of bad models upside down and trying to see what might work better? A sort of abstract intellectual understanding of the issue, there. Is this the way you were doing it?

finally, elainq said:
** Getting any sleep?
The times of your postings suggest sleep disorders. Hope you're taking care of yourself!


Thank you, I do appreciate the concern! I'm on Pacific Time, and I think the boards are on EST? I know I've been surprised sometimes. (Curt might be able to explain the posting times, as they don't match mine here at home at all.) Apparently my natural sleep cycle is sitting up with the graveyard shift, in spite of being jerked round to standard office hours. I don't think I'd call it a sleep disorder, exactly, but I do have a tendency to take awhile to settle in to working on something, then I get so involved in things, I keep going until I start falling asleep in the chair. (This can be a bit rough next day at work after lunch, that's for sure). Sort of a too-long attention span, instead of one that's too short, if that makes sense.
And gee, I don't know why thinking about elain's comments about submission getting Naga all hot and bothered might keep me up late...
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** Reti
Reti's a fascinating character, but he works great in the background, too. I'm sure if you develop need to flesh him out, you'll be able to.

** Caladrunan
hgladney wrote: I haven't really shown him losing his temper, either; he seems to be inhumanly laid-back and patient, and somehow, I don't think he would be all the time...
May I refer you to Bloodstorm, page 197. If that's not Caladrunan losing his temper, I don't want to be there when he really loses it. Ow.

** Leadership
hgladney wrote:And where'd Caladrunan learn to be so good at it? The stories that the Upai told him? His scary Great Aunt Agtunki? Or, as you said, turning all kinds of bad models upside down and trying to see what might work better? A sort of abstract intellectual understanding of the issue, there. Is this the way you were doing it?
My bet is on Agtunki and natural ability. For me, everytime I thought "that was stupid," I tried to figure out a better way.

Nighty night!
Elaine

P.S. I worked on my own writing tonight before checking your forum. :)
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I've been dominating the forum and I don't mean to. I'd really like to hear from other readers, so I'm asking...

What makes you passionate about Heather's books? We've all read lots of books without joining a list about them. What's special about Teot's War & Bloodstorm?

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elaine.q wrote:I've been dominating the forum and I don't mean to. I'd really like to hear from other readers, so I'm asking...

What makes you passionate about Heather's books? We've all read lots of books without joining a list about them. What's special about Teot's War & Bloodstorm?
You are provoking some very interesting discussion elaine.q. Please feel free to continue to do so!

As for why I am passionate about Heather's books, I think they are a great combination of characterization, action, politics, and world-building, with doses of effective humour thrown in, and some very compelling interpersonal relationships. Not many authors can deliver all those things!

They are also a refreshing change from 700-1000 page epics that many of my other favorite fantasy authors seem to want to churn out these days (although it sounds like the next installment may not be as compact as books 1 and 2). It's nice to be able to go back and reread a favorite in a couple of evenings.
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aahhh, now my head will explode. Poof!
:oops:
Thank you, Curt and Elaine!
:angel:
Curt, it does look like this next one is bigger, depending on how, or if, we break it up into part 1 & 2. Each one of those parts, so far, is a little bit bigger than the mss were for each of the published books, I think. (Haven't done a proper word-count to check on it.)
BUt hopefully it'll work out well enough that you won't mind *too* much fighting your way through something longer!
Hopefully it'll keep moving along just as quickly.
I've been putting in some time trying to make sure of that, which is why I'm not letting those three combat chapters go as they are, when I think they need fixing.
:whip:
Going back to something elaine said earlier:
I refer you to Bloodstorm, page 197. If that's not Caladrunan losing his temper, I don't want to be there when he really loses it. Ow.

Erm, hate to say this, but that's Caladrunan *almost* losing it. He's still got a grip on himself (even if it's by the very edge of his fingernails!), he's trying to make some points to everybody in the tent (especially to his son), and of course he's about ready to chew rocks and spit gravel, but he's hanging onto it. He hasn't really, honest-to-gawd *lost* it there.
:shock:
Blink...
Erm...gee. Ya know, I don't think *I* want to be there, either!
Soembody that big and that mad and that totally committed?
Run awaaay!!
:cold:
But gooooarsh, that'd be *such* a great scene, showing what can really make him totally berserk. (And yeah, that'd really be some berserk.)

I can think of a couple of things that would do this to him. Of course, strong threats to Naga. There's that opening sequence in the second book where Naga's just waking up and he's having to talk to the council about Naga's fits, which has him pretty ticked off, for instance. Not a happy camper there!
But I could see him getting pretty furious about serious threats to a lot of other people he cares about too, such as his sister or his aunt or his wife or any of his guards, and some he doesn't even know all that well. People who can't really defend themselves, nutty guys who talk to themselves and little old ladies and some of those refugees...
I can see Naga getting in his way, well aware it's gonna hurt bigtime, and being the only one who can stop Drin in time from wildman stuff that might get Drin seriously hurt.
Turnabout, so Naga is the sane one there, bringing Drin back from the brink.
8)
Yaarggh!! I only nailed one plot-bunny so far in this latest lot, I haven't even got started on the last couple of plot-bunnies that ran off giggling at me!!
:gun:

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P.S. I worked on my own writing tonight before checking your forum.

Yeahhh! More good stuff! :clap: :worship: More writing !!
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