Volleyball 2004 - Commentary
Moderator: Ghost
Are we going to let felonius win a Sherlock with just one post?
Come on let’s get the volleyball in the air.
Come on let’s get the volleyball in the air.
If ye love wealth better than liberty, the tranquility of servitude than the animating contest of freedom, go from us in peace. We ask not your counsels or arms. Crouch down and lick the hands which feed you. May your chains sit lightly upon you,
S Adams
S Adams
Excellent - Brad and Kahrey,
Intrigue, horror and comedy, and a very good summary of what has happened; I like them both. Great job!
Current: Brad – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Biotech Thriller), Entertaining +1 (very good), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4
Current: Kahrey – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Flashbacks), Entertaining +1 (very good), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4
Overall Scoring
felonius P: 12 O: 12 E: 11 C: 10 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 45
Brad_H P: 10 O: 10 E: 10 C: 9 RB: -2 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 37
Aunflin P: 8 O: 5 E: 8 C: 8 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 29
Kahrey P: 8 O: 5 E: 8 C: 7 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 28
Ghost P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL:4
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3
Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turnsâ€


Intrigue, horror and comedy, and a very good summary of what has happened; I like them both. Great job!

Current: Brad – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Biotech Thriller), Entertaining +1 (very good), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4
Current: Kahrey – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Flashbacks), Entertaining +1 (very good), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4
Overall Scoring
felonius P: 12 O: 12 E: 11 C: 10 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 45
Brad_H P: 10 O: 10 E: 10 C: 9 RB: -2 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 37
Aunflin P: 8 O: 5 E: 8 C: 8 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 29
Kahrey P: 8 O: 5 E: 8 C: 7 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 28
Ghost P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL:4
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3
Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turnsâ€
If ye love wealth better than liberty, the tranquility of servitude than the animating contest of freedom, go from us in peace. We ask not your counsels or arms. Crouch down and lick the hands which feed you. May your chains sit lightly upon you,
S Adams
S Adams
Ya know, speaking as someone who's in the top 1% of all SETI@home participants ... I really enjoyed portraying an alien kidnapping scene with mild overtones of bodily orifice violation.
It was an amusingly catheteric (pun w/'catharsic' intended) experience

The fact that the aliens involved loosely resemble Bastet (the Egyptian Goddess of cats) is just serendipitous icing on the cake, since the "Seti" project itself is named after another Egyptian God.
I like to write on multiple levels - it makes it more fun and amusing.
It was an amusingly catheteric (pun w/'catharsic' intended) experience





The fact that the aliens involved loosely resemble Bastet (the Egyptian Goddess of cats) is just serendipitous icing on the cake, since the "Seti" project itself is named after another Egyptian God.

I like to write on multiple levels - it makes it more fun and amusing.
Well done, Kahrey and Brad.
Nice stuff. You're good at structure, mate.
Got stuff to do today - will try to post au demain.
Brad - I hereby christen thee ALLEGORY MAN.The fact that the aliens involved loosely resemble Bastet (the Egyptian Goddess of cats) is just serendipitous icing on the cake, since the "Seti" project itself is named after another Egyptian God.
I like to write on multiple levels - it makes it more fun and amusing

Nice stuff. You're good at structure, mate.

Got stuff to do today - will try to post au demain.
Colourless green ideas sleep furiously
You're good at structure, mate
Thanks. I suppose that's a byproduct of my degrees in computers and math - although I havent really used either degree very much since leaving college, I'm still a bit of a geek for logic and structure.

Time permitting, I may try to squeeze in apost before leaving work today.
I have an idea for a "Polyglotic Drama" post set in a restaurant. Should be both fun and amusing.
Again very well done – felonius and Brad,
As always, were descriptive, creative, interesting and with a dab of humor.
Current: felonius – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Good Omens?), Entertaining +1 (PUSD and MSES), Continuity +1 (very smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4
Current: Brad – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Sci-Fi Drama), Entertaining +1 (very good), Continuity +1 (very smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4
Overall Scoring
felonius P: 13 O: 13 E: 12 C: 11 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 49
Brad_H P: 11 O: 11 E: 11 C: 10 RB: -2 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 41
Aunflin P: 8 O: 5 E: 8 C: 8 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 29
Kahrey P: 8 O: 5 E: 8 C: 7 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 28
Ghost P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL:4
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3
Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turnsâ€


As always, were descriptive, creative, interesting and with a dab of humor.
Current: felonius – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Good Omens?), Entertaining +1 (PUSD and MSES), Continuity +1 (very smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4
Current: Brad – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Sci-Fi Drama), Entertaining +1 (very good), Continuity +1 (very smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4
Overall Scoring
felonius P: 13 O: 13 E: 12 C: 11 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 49
Brad_H P: 11 O: 11 E: 11 C: 10 RB: -2 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 41
Aunflin P: 8 O: 5 E: 8 C: 8 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 29
Kahrey P: 8 O: 5 E: 8 C: 7 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 28
Ghost P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL:4
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3
Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turnsâ€
Last edited by Ghost on Tue Jun 01, 2004 8:40 am, edited 1 time in total.
If ye love wealth better than liberty, the tranquility of servitude than the animating contest of freedom, go from us in peace. We ask not your counsels or arms. Crouch down and lick the hands which feed you. May your chains sit lightly upon you,
S Adams
S Adams
Sherlock Winner for Week 4
felonius 8
Brad_H 8
Kahrey 4
To break the tie we have three choices:
1) felonius and Brad each win ½ a point
2) I have to break the tie by deciding which had the better narratives
3) We go for double or nothing (But someone else could get the points)
Let me have some feedback.

felonius 8
Brad_H 8
Kahrey 4
To break the tie we have three choices:
1) felonius and Brad each win ½ a point
2) I have to break the tie by deciding which had the better narratives
3) We go for double or nothing (But someone else could get the points)
Let me have some feedback.

If ye love wealth better than liberty, the tranquility of servitude than the animating contest of freedom, go from us in peace. We ask not your counsels or arms. Crouch down and lick the hands which feed you. May your chains sit lightly upon you,
S Adams
S Adams
I suppose I cheated a little by just naming a novel I was ripping off - point taken, Judge. Maybe I should have used "Fire and Brimstone Burlesque", or something like that. We did have 'Twin Peaks' and 'Yugi-oh' previously, though...Good Omens (may not a true genre, but now it can’t be used again)
I'm impartial about the Sherlocks - I'm having a lot of fun playing and I'm not that concerned about 'em - I trust your discretion, Ghost.

Colourless green ideas sleep furiously
Cum’on Aunflin, Kahrey, Grilka – or somebody new give it a try. 

If ye love wealth better than liberty, the tranquility of servitude than the animating contest of freedom, go from us in peace. We ask not your counsels or arms. Crouch down and lick the hands which feed you. May your chains sit lightly upon you,
S Adams
S Adams
Perhaps the continuity that's been slowly building has begun discouraging new participants from joining in ?
I was hoping the loosened continuity focus (it's optional) in the current match would help prevent that effect.
C'mon people ... be bold !
Don't be afraid to turn the plot completely on it's head, throw curve balls, or kill off long-running characters. Be crazy & agressive, and just go for it
I was hoping the loosened continuity focus (it's optional) in the current match would help prevent that effect.
C'mon people ... be bold !
Don't be afraid to turn the plot completely on it's head, throw curve balls, or kill off long-running characters. Be crazy & agressive, and just go for it

Last edited by Darb on Mon May 24, 2004 12:20 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Aunflin and Kahrey and Brad have actually been a lot more diligent about continuity than I have...I usually just use the last poster's final sentence, and provided names, to help shape my own posts...
Killing off some characters sounds interesting...I'm thinking 'Agatha Christie', perhaps...
But not right now. I sure wish I was in the same time zone as you guys. It's after 1 AM here and I have to go to BED.
Think of all the extra work writers could get done if they didn't have to sleep...
Until tomorrow, fellow scribes...
Killing off some characters sounds interesting...I'm thinking 'Agatha Christie', perhaps...
But not right now. I sure wish I was in the same time zone as you guys. It's after 1 AM here and I have to go to BED.
Think of all the extra work writers could get done if they didn't have to sleep...

Until tomorrow, fellow scribes...
Colourless green ideas sleep furiously
I just got back into town last night and had to work today...so that's why I haven't posted. I'll see if I can hit a volley tomorrow...
"A writer's chosen task is to write well and professionally. If you can't keep doing it, then you're no longer a professional, but a gifted amateur." L. E. Modessit, jr.
Do we want to amend the rules that if after 72 hours no one has posted, the person can post again? 

If ye love wealth better than liberty, the tranquility of servitude than the animating contest of freedom, go from us in peace. We ask not your counsels or arms. Crouch down and lick the hands which feed you. May your chains sit lightly upon you,
S Adams
S Adams