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Very good felonius, :clap: :clap: :clap:

It started slow but ended great. :evil: :banana:

Current: felonius – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Gothic) Entertaining +1 (great), Continuity +0 (confusing) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 3

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 7 O: 7 E: 6 C: 4 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 27
Brad_H P: O: 5 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 20
Aunflin P: 5 O: 4 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 19
Kahrey P: 4 O: 2 E: 4 C: 3 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 13
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turns”), an Epic Poem, Gothic

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Post by felonius »

Confusing transition? Hey, judge - with all due respect - just allow the Great Dragon to change from a literal dragon into the name of an inn and you're there!

I'd buy it as the name of an inn in medieval times!!

(just wanted to put that out there. don't want to be in contempt of the court or anything... :) )
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Post by Ghost »

felonius, you are not out of order.

I had considered that the Great Dragon could be interpreted as an Inn. I was harsh with my ruling of “confusing”, and I should have ruled, “challenging”. In any case, motioned overruled. :smash:

Bailiff escort the plaintiff from the court room.

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Post by Aunflin »

Good job, Felonius. :clap: I thought the transition went quite smoothly. Robert was suffering a "nojshe trip" after all. But alas! I am not the judge--and wouldn't want to be if given the chance.

I wonder what "Darb" will think about it? :P
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*sigh* okay, back to my cell I go...hope my next hearing is soon, though - all they have to read in there are old issues of Good Housekeeping...
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Excellent Aunflin, :clap: :clap: :clap:

I really like the direction that you and felonius are taking this. :clap:

Current: Aunflin – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +0 ( :roll: ) Entertaining +1 (great), Continuity +1 (very smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 3

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 7 O: 7 E: 6 C: 4 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 27
Aunflin P: 6 O: 4 E: 6 C: 6 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 22
Brad_H P: O: 5 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 20
Kahrey P: 4 O: 2 E: 4 C: 3 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 13
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turns”), an Epic Poem, Gothic

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Post by Aunflin »

Thanks Ghost, though I thought my contribution was a little sorry. I really need to work on my genre hopping skills.

Oh, well...
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Just to make it a little interesting - shall we assign a sherlock in some fashion?

I can think of some suggestions as to how to make this fair but will post them only if other peeps are interested in floating the idea...

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Sounds interesting.

Anyone else like the idea?
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Hear-yea, hear-yea, the appeal of felonius verses the IBDoF, the court is now in session. The honorable Judge Roy Bean presiding.
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Be seated.

Upon review of the testimony of the expert witness, Aulfin, stating under oath that the said transition was smooth. And furthermore, due to the new evidence brought forth indicating that the prosecution’s chief witness, a Mr. Robert, was under the influence of a known narcotic, Nojshe, at the time of said continuity. The court rules in favor of felonius and awards defendant one Continuity point.
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Case dismissed.
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the sherlock idea sounds good to me!
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OK - I realise we haven't had everyone sound off on the sherlock idea yet - but we've had enough that I'll feel happy making my suggestion.

Here it is - that once all participants who've posted more than once to the thread have posted 10 times - their overall score get's tallied and the winner gets a shiny new Sherlock...

And then, the "Sherlock total" is reset to zero, meaning that there is a baseline cut, and the next Sherlock score is based on the DIFFRERANCE from the last time...

I do realise that this gives a natural advantage to somebody who makes many more posts than somebody else, or to express this differantly This method does giove a disadvantage to the last person to make 10 posts...

I am open to any other scoring suggestions [Esp. as I have YET to play...]



This is just an idea - and you are all welcome to come up with something more [or less].

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How about a weekly winner, from Monday through Sunday? The highest total score get a Sherlock. Then you don’t have to keep track of the number of posts or penalize the tenth poster. I can go back and award two previous winners.
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sounds fine to me, that does.

i just posted.... not sure where i was going with that....
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That was great Kahrey, :clap: :clap:

I really like the turn of events, I don’t know why I pictured Tatoo from Fantasy Island (just me I guess :crazy: ).

Current: Kahrey – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Prophecy) Entertaining +1 (very), Continuity +1 (door busting smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 7 O: 7 E: 6 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 25
Aunflin P: 6 O: 4 E: 6 C: 6 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 22
Brad_H P: O: 5 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 20
Kahrey P: 5 O: 3 E: 5 C: 4 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 17
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turnsâ€
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Post by KiltanneN »

Ghost wrote:Brad_H P: O: 5 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 20
I am still confused by the Brad_H P: being blank...


On another note - I think a weekly winner 12am Mon Morning to Sun Night 12pm could be another simpler and just as fair way to go...

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Overall Scoring
felonius P: 7 O: 7 E: 6 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 25
Aunflin P: 6 O: 4 E: 6 C: 6 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 22
Brad_H P: 5 O: 5 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 20
Kahrey P: 5 O: 3 E: 5 C: 4 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 17
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turnsâ€
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Post by Darb »

I'm back - I'll try to get caught up on the VB thread as free time permits. :thumb:

/me looks forward to reading all the posts made since last thursday :deviate:

EDIT: I'm mildy scandalized by the number of people who appear to have blown their genre point lately. C'mon guys, we haven't even come close to scraping the bottom of the ol the barrel yet. Ok, here ... I'll even help people out a bit by tossing out a few ideas I was hoarding for myself. :deviate:

* Action Movie
* International Espionage
* Reality TV
* Superheroes / Crime Fighters
* Cop Show (NYPD Blue, Starsky & Hutch, TJ Hooker, Adam 12, etc.)
* Quantum Leap and/or Star Trek and/or Historical Flashback (time travel or personal reminiscence)
* Adult Movie (you'd have to edit out 80% of the action to keep it PG-13, which, in & of itself, is pretty funny)
* Broadway / Theater in the park
* Hollywood musical
* 1950's B-Movie Monster Flick
* Golden Age of Radio
* Slapstick
* Film Noir / Gumshoe / Investigative Reporter or P.I.
* Slasher movie
* Eldritch Horror (HP Lovecraft) or Ghost Story
* Children's Story
etc ...

That's just for starters.

Let's get busy people. :thumb:
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Post by felonius »

Great list, Gard. I agree wholeheartedly that the surface has BARELY been scratched. The world of literature is GARGANTUAN, people!

Here's a few more I thought I'd toss in:

Dystopian
Coming Of Age
Burlesque (or Parody, if you like - this is your chance to ridicule something you feel deserves to be ridiculed!)
Biography/Autobiography
Western (think of this right after a fantasy post - magic and sorcery and then smelly cows - RICH possibilities!!)
Thriller
Crime Fiction
Historical
Apologue (a fable with a moral, like Aesop's stuff - personified animals and objects)
Existentialist (something that points out absurdity and meaninglessness of existence - a personal fave of mine)
Sonnet (follow Aunflin's lead and practice some poetry!)

You can also just choose a favourite author and imitate the bugger! Make us believe you are she or he! Trust me, it's fun...

This list could go on forever....

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Post by Aunflin »

I know...I can be a bit lazy at times. :wink: I'll try to do better. :mrgreen:
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/me guzzles an ice-cold Corona at the tikki bar, belches thunderously, slaps down a ten-spot, and then saunters past Roy Bean's elevated judging chair on his way back to the stands.

/me notices the Judge is badly sunburned, and beginning to resemble a broiled lobster.

Hey Roy - that little dab of zinc oxide on the schnoz just ain't cuttin it, dude. :deviate:
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Brad wrote:/me guzzles an ice-cold Corona at the tikki bar, belches thunderously, slaps down a ten-spot, and then saunters past Roy Bean's elevated judging chair on his way back to the stands.

/me notices the Judge is badly sunburned, and beginning to resemble a broiled lobster.

Hey Roy - that little dab of zinc oxide on the schnoz just ain't cuttin it, dude. :deviate:
WHAT?

Gob nabit that wasn’ bad, Brad :clap: :clap:

Current: Brad – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (B-Monster Flick) Entertaining +1 (I liked it), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 7 O: 7 E: 6 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 25
Brad P: 6 O: 6 E: 6 C: 6 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 24
Aunflin P: 6 O: 4 E: 6 C: 6 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 22
Kahrey P: 5 O: 3 E: 5 C: 4 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 17
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turnsâ€
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Post by Darb »

Ok, I polished it up a bit - it's better now. The initial draft was a little uneven and threadbare.

p.s. Dont forget to apply some sunscreen, Roy ... yer lookin a little red there. :smokin:
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Post by Aunflin »

Ah, that is better, Brad.

Earlier...well, I'll be nice :roll:
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Hey, at least I noticed & fixed it myself. Giving Tobe a backwoods drawl, making his wife a bit less pleasant, adding the dog and the firelight, and describing the door impacts a bit better gave the post a tad more ambience & depth. :P

So ... somebody else go.
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