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Adiamante, First Mass Market Edition, p. 277

"...except a crazed vorpal's an oxymoron."

Shouldn't it be redundant rather than an oxymoron?
Considering the principles involved, what are the odds that Murphy's Law is named after the wrong guy?
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No doubt it should have been.

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Fairhaven Rising (hardcover)

p389

"So did Taelya and Sheralt, and fortified by the ale Zekkar had brought them..."

Zekkar -> Zekkarat
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Fairhaven Risig (hardcover)

p347

"Neither Taelya nor I have sensed any. Have you?" As Taelya answered....

Since Taelya is talking to Valchar alone, this doesn't make sense. It makes more sense for Taeyla -> Kaeryla

Even with these editorial failures, this is still an excellent book. The errors have only popped out to me upon re-reading.
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As I described in a recent blog on my website, there were unique circumstances that contributed to the excessive number of typographical errors in Fairhaven Rising.

Thank you for you kind words. A small number of readers have found it "boring" and bereft of "magic," largely, I suspect, because they have little interest in women as real and independent characters.

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Yes, Incels are very annoying.

I've re-read Fairhaven Rising and found a few more items.

p 36

"The traders with large wagons and guards mostly stay there," replied Jessyla.

Jessyla -> Taelya

p 119

Taelya again raised an additional company-sized containment.."What, the large containment?

and on p 122

Taelya released the larger containment...

Beltur has previously had Taelya practicing with company-sized shields, not containments. I'll leave it to you to decide if you want to change containment to shie lds.

p 162

Three additional mages mages aren't likely to make up the difference,

three -> four

p 242

There had only been three traders, and one had been from Sligo, the second had been Lord Korsaen under another name, and the third has been the fur trader from Jellico...

I re-checked Outcasts of Order and while Beltur and Jessyla travelled with Karmult of Lydiar and Vaenturl(Lord Korsaen) to Axalt. Jhotyl and maybe Paastar are the only traders with them on the trip to Rytel. I couldn't find any text stating Paastar was from Sligo. He seems to vanish after being mentioned. In any event, Lord Korsean wasn't with Taelya on that trip.

And lastly,
p 244

"He hired Father and Beltur to protect him..."

I wondered if this would read better as "Father and Uncle Beltur"
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Also noted...

obviously you read closely!


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I listened to the audiobook of The Ecolitan Operation over the weekend (one of my personal LEM faves :D), and I noticed a narration editing error:

At around the 7:23:00 mark the narrator read a statement in Luren's voice (incorrectly), paused, then re-read the statement in JimJoy's voice (correctly). The editor did not remove the incorrect portion from the recording.
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Fairhaven Rising (hardcover)

p212

"I don't know for certain, but I'd tend to agree, since Kaeryla can do concealments and Valchar can't."

Concealments should be containments. On page 209, Valchar states "I can conceal perhaps a squad of troopers for a quint."
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Thank you.


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I was re-reading IMAGER'S CHALLENGE, Rhenn and other imagers are talking about the head of the Collegium during the reign of Rex Dafoo and state that it was Cyran. Is that a mistake, the common lost of truth over time, another example that powerful Imager leaders get lost in history, or something else.
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Let's just call it a combination of all three.

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Isolate
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Chapter 14
p. 81
In the paragraph beginning with "The Justiciary Minister ..
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Witnesses would have seen see you as the one in the wrong.
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I think "see" is not needed.

Chapter 39
p. 216
In the paragraph beginning with "That's not surprising ..
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He smiled again. "It was a performance than only Avraal and I could appreciate."
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than -> that

Chapter 74
p. 415
In the paragraph beginning with Dekkard poured himself a mug ..
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The story on the demonstrations included others he hadn't known, in Uldwyrk and Surpunta, and the destruction of regional Security headquarters in those three cities as well.
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Unless I'm misunderstanding the passage, only two cities are mentioned -- not three.

Chapter 76
p. 431
In the paragraph beginning with Ysella shook her head. ..
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"That's will make some of the Security agents angry."
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That's -> That

Chapter 89
p. 509
In the paragraph beginning with "That's more than enough," ..
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"We should head back to the dining room. .."
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This line threw me because they're -- I believe -- in the staff dining room when she says it. I'm now thinking that she meant the Councilor's dining room.
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Thank you.


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Councilor
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Chapter 8
p. 44
Second to last paragraph ..
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"Was it also his decision to have them fire on armed protestors and then try to plant weapons on them to justify the shootings?
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I think "armed" should be "unarmed".

Chapter 40
p. 278
In the paragraph beginning with "Authored by .. (mid-way down the page)
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Authored by Hasheem, that amendment offered sought to increase Treasury appropriations to fund the payroll of transferred Special Agents, on the grounds that the initial appropriations had been inadequate."
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Depending on what you were rewording it (I assume) to say, I would either change "that" to "the" -- or drop "offered".
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Contrarian
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Either I'm losing my touch -- or you and the editor(s) already found (and resolved) any problems.
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I think we've worked out a better system... fingers crossed.

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