Volleyball 2004 - Commentary

felonius · Post by **felonius** » Thu May 06, 2004 10:22 am

Good to go - thanks. That's more than I needed. Realized it was this typo that tripped me up:

He staggers briefly, momentarily stunned, as his attackers makes a getaway down a cross alley.

'Twas 'attackers' that confused me for a moment...thought I'd missed something. Thanks for the synopsis anyway, though.

Post by **Darb** » Thu May 06, 2004 10:56 am

Ooops ... sorry bout the typo.

I'll go fix it, and read your post, in a bit

felonius · Post by **felonius** » Thu May 06, 2004 11:15 am

All right. Posted. Thought I'd go Charlie Kaufman style and see what that did for the flavour of the soup...

Post by **Darb** » Thu May 06, 2004 12:24 pm

Felonius:

Post by **Darb** » Thu May 06, 2004 1:38 pm

Posted ... Kilty's gonna spray his coffee when he finally gets around to reading the latest vollyball posts.

/me jams to AC/DC's "Dirty Deeds"

Post by **Ghost** » Thu May 06, 2004 2:15 pm

felonius and Brad,

and

Well written, Soap Operas are not my cup of tea.

Current: felonius â€“ Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (new genre) Entertaining +1 (so-so) Continuity +1 (volley balled) Rule Breaker â€“0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4

Current: Brad_H â€“ Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (new genre) Entertaining +1 (if you like making fun of Palmer), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker â€“0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 6 O: 6 E: 5 C: 4 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 21
Brad_H P: O: 5 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 20
Aunflin P: 3 O: 3 E: 3 C: 3 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 12
Kahrey P: 2 O: 2 E: 2 C: 1 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 7
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (â€œAs the IBDoF Turnsâ€

Post by **Darb** » Thu May 06, 2004 2:17 pm

That should be +4 for felonius, not +3

That'll probably be all from me until sometime early next week, so have a blast everyone

p.s. Ghost - if it's any consolation, I share your disdain for soap operas. I picked that genre on a whim, because it's the first one that occured to me after reading Felonius' post. An angle popped into my head, and I promptly ran with it. Elapsed time - about 20-30 mins. Easy stuff.

Post by **Ghost** » Thu May 06, 2004 3:31 pm

Brad_H wrote:That should be +4 for felonius, not +3

Thanks Brad, I caught it before you did.

Post by **Darb** » Thu May 06, 2004 5:12 pm

Entertaining +1 (if you like making fun of Palmer)

Hey, I dished just as much indirect abuse at "Gard", whom Felonius probably intended to be a backhanded reference to moi ... given the similarities in names and the segue in perspectives & posting genres.

Post by **Ghost** » Thu May 06, 2004 5:20 pm

I would changed feloniusâ€™ score from â€œso-soâ€

Post by **Darb** » Thu May 06, 2004 5:25 pm

Hey, anagram-pseudonyms are a time honored tradition in writing ... it was fairly obvious to me, although others might have missed it

He did great, AFAIAC

Post by **Ghost** » Thu May 06, 2004 5:49 pm

Give me the dunce cap and I'll go sit in the corner.

Post by **Darb** » Thu May 06, 2004 6:27 pm

How about we just work you into one of our upcoming posts instead ?

Sauce for the goose, as it were.

Post by **KiltanneN** » Thu May 06, 2004 7:48 pm

ROFLOL

The Irresistable Head of Studio Palmer strikes again

I damn near choked to death I laughed so hard...

kilt

Kahrey · Post by **Kahrey** » Sat May 08, 2004 12:46 am

dont know how well that flows, but im just trying to have fun with it. not sure it made much sense though. i kinda think its sorry, but i posted now. hopefully i will again tomorrow!

felonius · Post by **felonius** » Sat May 08, 2004 9:18 am

Kahrey - damn! Remind me never to go on a nojshe trip with you, girl!

At least now we know why you're dressed in red, huh?

I really liked your 'liquid moonlight' metaphor!

Do you know a singer named Leonard Cohen? He's got a lyric that goes: "On our bed where the moon has been sweating..." Keep playing around with mixing solids and liquids and light in your descriptions - that kind of stuff can be really powerful.

P.S good call: Gard = Brad. Wasn't sure how comfortable he'd be writing about himself in the third. Can see now it was a baseless concern.

I don't even want to guess at the subtext going on between he and Kilt in that last post....

Aunflin · Post by **Aunflin** » Sat May 08, 2004 9:32 am

Good job, Kahrey! That nojshe stuff's sure coming in handy

Hey, Felonius, you wanna go next or should I?

felonius · Post by **felonius** » Sat May 08, 2004 9:43 am

It's all yours Aunflin. I'm heading out on the town to see if I can't get myself into some mischief (it's 11 PM here now).

Look forward to reading your post tomorrow - that is, if I am still able to read, or for that matter, still resemble human form.

Aunflin · Post by **Aunflin** » Sat May 08, 2004 4:07 pm

Well, there's me post. Couldn't figure out which genre to write in...so I guess I'll lose a point for that

But what the hey! This is for fun, right?

Post by **Ghost** » Sat May 08, 2004 5:23 pm

Very good Kahrey and Aunflin,

Gives burn in hell a new meaning.

Current: Kahrey â€“ Post +1 (obvious), Originality +0 (Horror already used) Entertaining +1 (reforming bodies) Continuity +1 (meanwhileâ€¦) Rule Breaker â€“0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 3

Current: Aunflin â€“ Post +1 (obvious), Originality +0 (I donâ€™t know) Entertaining +1 (horror/humor), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker â€“0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 3

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 6 O: 6 E: 5 C: 4 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 21
Brad_H P: O: 5 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 20
Aunflin P: 4 O: 3 E: 4 C: 4 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 15
Kahrey P: 3 O: 2 E: 3 C: 2 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 10
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (â€œAs the IBDoF Turnsâ€

Kahrey · Post by **Kahrey** » Sat May 08, 2004 8:34 pm

good job Aunflin!

you took that exactly where i was hoping it would go.

i love the thoughts of liquid moonlight, sunshine, starlight, things like that. i really dont know where i was going with that, but i had to keep myself from writing more! im about to go now....

Kahrey · Post by **Kahrey** » Sat May 08, 2004 9:04 pm

this one shall be "The Battle between a Demon of Light, and an Angel of the Darkness."

i iwsh somebody could go like now. im ready to write some more

Aunflin · Post by **Aunflin** » Sun May 09, 2004 7:45 am

Oh my, Kahrey, that was pretty good.

I'll have to give it some thought before I take the next volley...

Aunflin · Post by **Aunflin** » Sun May 09, 2004 9:12 am

All right. There's my post. It could have been better. But I think I did okay, considering the time restrictions...

Post by **Ghost** » Sun May 09, 2004 11:45 am

Excellent Kahrey and Aunflin,

Great set up and spike. Excerpt from an Epic Poem "Into the Depths of Hell"

Current: Kahrey – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +0 (Fantasy already used) Entertaining +1 (magic) Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 3

Current: Aunflin – Post +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (epic poem) Entertaining +1 (great), Continuity +1 (smooth) Rule Breaker –0 (no rule breaking) TOTAL: 4

Overall Scoring
felonius P: 6 O: 6 E: 5 C: 4 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 21
Brad_H P: O: 5 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 20
Aunflin P: 5 O: 4 E: 5 C: 5 RB: -0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 19
Kahrey P: 4 O: 2 E: 4 C: 3 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 13
friendforlife P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 0 RB:-0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3

Genre used so far:
Urban contemporary, sci-fi (sort of), Hardy Boys Mystery, stream-of-consciousness, Vomit-Inducing Romance, Fantasy, Twin Peaks, Horror, comedy, modern fantasy, Japanese Anime, Yugi-Oh!, Magic the Gathering, Young adult, Screen Play Script, Epistolary, Soap Opera (“As the IBDoF Turns”), an Epic Poem

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