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Thanks, felonius! :)

/bows to crowd of hecklers and runs off stage as the bottles start crashing into the chicken wire... :shock:
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Yes, it's very good to have you back. :wink:
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laurie wrote:Only if you're made of chocolate.

/me is very picky eater :wink:
/me slathers self with chocolate syrup.

Close enough ? :smokin: :P
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EEek.....


hmmm....if there was a little grated coconut too....tempting..... :P
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Plenty of coke with it.... :wink: :D
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Hee hee.

Only if it is diet coke.

Nice job on the VB 2005. Brandi's IQ has gone up exponentially!

(She must have been under the influence of the meds while writing in her blog.)

Heh heh

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Ewww, NO! It MUST be regular!! No diet or caffeine free, crap.... It's not as good that way!!
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Nice post, Kahrey!

Now me needs to think up a proper addition to the story.

Hmmmm....
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Thanks.

Yes, you need to post now.
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clong: :clap:
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CHO and KAHREY: Excellent! :D :thumb:

CLONG: Sir: :worship: Please continue to post in this thread. Or not? What time is it? :lol:
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Loved the post, clong! :clap: :worship:

And I agree with felon: please keep posting in this thread. :thumb:
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Thank you, Kvetch, felonius, and Aunflin. It was fun. I will continue to try to think of a few creative ideas to contribute.
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Damn, damn good, Kahrey and clong, (Kahrey and clong that sounds like . . . oh never mind).


His eyes squinted in interest . . . You wouldn't know him . . . stared off into nowhere . . .


Mysterious Stranger is never late. Or he is. . . . Mysterious Stranger is always late. Or he is not . . . Somehow he is never late. Or he is . . . That means no meatloaf . . . With broccoli. Or not. . . . Definitely fried with broccoli . . .


Current: Kahrey +1 (obvious), Originality +0 (Just Fiction), Entertaining +1 (You wouldn't know him.), Continuity +1 (smooth), Rule Breaker + 0 (no rules broken), Bonus +0 (NA) TOTAL: 3

Current: clong +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Beckett style), Entertaining +1 (It was. Or was it?), Continuity +1 (smooth), Rule Breaker + 0 (no rules broken), Bonus +0 (NA) TOTAL: 4


Current Volleyball 2004 Overall Standing:
felonius P: 2 O: 2 E: 2 C: 2 RB: 0 Bonus: 2 TOTAL: 10
Cho Chiyo P: 2 O: 2 E: 2 C: 2 RB: 0 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 9
Brad P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: 0 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 5
clong P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: 0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 4
Kahrey P: 1 O: 0 E: 1 C: 1 RB: 0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 3


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Other: Madcap, Decision Tree, Adolescent Girl's BLOG entries, Crushing Self-Help, Written Parental Excuse, Beckett Style

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Great job, clong!! LOVE it!!!
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I just wrote....something. Don't know what it is, don't know if the genre I put is right, but I confused my own self. :crazy:
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Well, I'm not sure about the genre description either, but it works well, even coming off of the rather bizarre transition I left for you. Nice job.
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Hehe, I don't even know what it is!
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I think 'paranoia a la Lovecraft' might do as a description. It's good.
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GHOST: Pardon me, Mr. Boo, but I think you goofed a little on your scores for Kahrey and Clong. Check your addition :wink:

Well done all !

I'm still a bit busy ... will jump back in at time permits.

Clong - feel free to read last year's match, in order to get a feel for things. And welcome aboard. :thumb:
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Brad wrote:GHOST: Pardon me, Mr. Boo, but I think you goofed a little on your scores for Kahrey and Clong. Check your addition :wink:

Well done all !

I'm still a bit busy ... will jump back in at time permits.

Clong - feel free to read last year's match, in order to get a feel for things. And welcome aboard. :thumb:
Thanks Brad. I felt pretty good about the first post, but maybe I was a little heavy handed in the second? I see where Ghost got the addition wrong the first time through with kahrey, but other than that it looks right to me.
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CLONG: I haven't read your 2nd post yet, but given some of the wretched excesses of last year's match, I doubt that it's possible to be too heavy handed ... or should I say heavy footed ? :lol:
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The Weekly Sherlock Winner
Jan 10th through the 16th


Cho Chiyo: 5 :clap:

Kahrey: 3


I'm a little late getting this out :oops:

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As soon as my data entry hits a lull, I'll start doing VB again in ernest. Perhaps next week ;)
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I thought I had posted this already :oops: :

Excellent, Kahrey and clong, :lol: :clap: :lol: :thumb:


The clock says I am. . . who can I trust to tell me the truth?. . . forget it all....just walk....walk....


. . . squeeze between the ads . . . Hound Dogs Archery team . . . Periwinkle clan has a colorful history . . . unidentified body with an arrow between the eyes . . .


Current: Kahrey +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Fantasy w/ Paranoia and Sense), Entertaining +1 ( ), Continuity +1 (smooth), Rule Breaker + 0 (no rules broken), Bonus +0 (NA) TOTAL: 4

Current: clong +1 (obvious), Originality +1 (Local Newspaper), Entertaining +1 (Lewis Great Balls of Fire), Continuity +1 (smooth), Rule Breaker + 0 (no rules broken), Bonus +0 (NA) TOTAL: 4


Current Volleyball 2004 Overall Standing:
felonius P: 2 O: 2 E: 2 C: 2 RB: 0 Bonus: 2 TOTAL: 10
Cho Chiyo P: 2 O: 2 E: 2 C: 2 RB: 0 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 9
clong P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: 0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 8
Kahrey P: 1 O: 0 E: 1 C: 1 RB: 0 Bonus: 0 TOTAL: 7
Brad P: 1 O: 1 E: 1 C: 1 RB: 0 Bonus: 1 TOTAL: 5


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Fantasy: Paranoid Fantasy
Other: Madcap, Decision Tree, Adolescent Girl's BLOG entries, Crushing Self-Help, Written Parental Excuse, Beckett Style, Local Newspaper


OMG – Brad is in last place :oops: :cry: .

:smash:

/actually Laurie and Aunflin are in last place because they haven’t posted yet (me as judge, doesn't count for last place :twisted: - quit complaining them the rules :mrgreen: )
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